1 (edited by Old Doll 2010-06-07 21:42:36)

Topic: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Here's a wee piece for those who like my simple poetry. As a child i used to play along the  Grand Canal my aunt lived along side the  canal. I used to play where "Patrick Kavanagh" sat reading and writing. he was very grumpy, God be good to him lol and me for saying that ! I'd watch the canal  coal boats coming through the locks. The men's faces were as black as soot. I always thought they looked exotic. Us kids used to think they were off to foreign lands, so we shout " Mister will you bring us back a monkey"  Ti's it only a monkey ya want" They'd say. we'll be back in a week, and ill have the dandiest monkey ya ever laid eyes on for ya." Sure we'd be thrilled at the thoughts. Me Mam and aunt would laugh loudly saying "Were rearing enough monkeys as it is" It may seem a bit weird in this piece, but it is as my thoughts were when  writing. Thank you as always for reading.


Keep looking out, don’t look back in.

  Home life, work, years of bliss
Deflecting now to “who is this  ?
The vastness of the sea i skim
I’m looking out, to look back in

A pretty sail boat takes to sea,
Making leeway, unlike me.
I sailed on passions Looney bin
I’m looking out, to look back in.

Canal boats coming through the lock
Childhood company, voices mock
“Mister, will you bring me back a monkey “
Memoried soaked laughter deep within
I’m looking out, to look back in.

Hot flashes now sometimes provoke
Feelings of doneness, hard to cope
Second life? Don’t feel  so grim
I’m looking out, to look back in.

The child, now adult conjoined twins “
Both rise above the minds chagrins
Hands entwined, new life begins
Keep looking out, don’t look back in.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Thank you sunshine,

I will do just that !

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

I LOVE it Old Doll... and your cute childhood story to go with!  Jasonhague is right, it's AMAZING!

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What constitutes excellent music is in the ears of the listener.

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

This took me with you.......again.  You're so good

reminds me of the First Addition song  "I Just Dropped in To see What Condition My Condition is in"
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yZ8k6fVe25k

I thought ; If I had one idea,
and took it from beginning to end.
I would try another.

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Yes, very good Old Doll.  You always seem to capture complicated feelings with simple words

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Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Thank you all for reading and the comments.

Its always appreciated.

Condition im in  ? Marcalan. lol.  I remember it well sir.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Hello Dolly, this took my breath away, as most of your writing does....I had to log-in just to tell you so!  T

8 (edited by jamesturner125 2010-06-11 09:58:42)

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

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Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Dolly, very esoteric, and as always, excellently  scripted. Keep up the great penswomanship. how's that for a mouthful - lol - it is supposed to be gender ambivalent and friendly.

Keep on Rocking and remember Animals Feel Pain Too.

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Hi Lena,

It's nice to get a little catchphrase you can repeat, I never can so I'm always looking for a title!

But this is so good, we've had a few discussions about the good old days, when the written word evokes memories (for me anyway) of the fifties, hot summers cold winters, playing cricket on the beach, and just going out for a spin in the car cos we didnt have TV....and all the world seemed friendly.
Thanks for the memory

Phill

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Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Thank You"

Your all so kind to take the time to read my pieces.


Blessings in abundance to you all.


Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

When you write you always take me right along with you. So vivid! So fun!
toots

We pronounce it "Guf Coast".
Ya'll wanna go down to the Guf?

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Very Nice Lena,

"The Dutchman falls asleep and Margaret blows the candle out"

Later, Wayne P

14 (edited by Frequent Flyer 2010-06-18 22:59:03)

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

With all due respect to all the other wonderful poets on Chordie, it's no wonder why I zero in your entries. Another splendid write, Old Doll.  May I?!

The woman and child sing in rhyme; with disregard for the sands of time
One smiles the other laughs, one touches the other feels, one peers the other sees
No need to search far to find the person we truly are
Don’t judge the bark of this aging tree; look inside to find the real me

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

FF, this snippet is truly amazing; please grace us with more! You folks out here in ChordieLand exude poetry at its best!  -T

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Frequent Flyer wrote:

With all due respect to all the other wonderful poets on Chordie, it's no wonder why I zero in your entries. Another splendid write, Old Doll.  May I?!

The woman and child sing in rhyme; with disregard for the sands of time
One smiles the other laughs, one touches the other feels, one peers the other sees
No need to search far to find the person we truly are
Don’t judge the bark of this aging tree; look inside to find the real me

Thank you all again for the comments..

FF, i wish i could pen like your piece..  It speaks volumes. I really love it!

Thank you and a big hug to you also.

Old Doll

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Beautiful, just like you Old Doll !

Give everything but up.

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

hi helena you have some wonderful memories there,lovely written composition,well done.....stay cool

love is life ,life is for love,keep a true heart and live life to the full....stay cool

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Thank you vwry much kind sirs for taking the time to comment.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Frequent Flyer wrote:

With all due respect to all the other wonderful poets on Chordie, it's no wonder why I zero in your entries. Another splendid write, Old Doll.  May I?!

The woman and child sing in rhyme; with disregard for the sands of time
One smiles the other laughs, one touches the other feels, one peers the other sees
No need to search far to find the person we truly are
Don’t judge the bark of this aging tree; look inside to find the real me

I would love to add this also to my own piece FF.

Do i have your permission, i will credit it to you when i'm famous lol..

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Keep looking out, Dont look back in. Helena Donovan.

Old Doll,
I'm flattered by your request!  Of course, you may include this simple rhyme in your splendid poem.  Many thanks.