Topic: Heartbeat

This is the first song I've written using jazzish chords, it was kinda fun, breath of fresh air. The progression stays the same

Heartbeat

Dm7         A7              Cmaj7     Cmaj6
There is a song written in the stars
A story of the secrets of who we are
I tried to reach to pull it close
but it said to wait till the sun comes homes
If it all made sense in a broken mind
what would be left to better us?
How can we sing the sacred songs
before we've learned to really love

CHORUS
Dm7   A7         Cmaj7 Cmaj6
I can feel it go down
           Dm7               A7                  Cmaj7           Cmaj6                               
like the heartbeat that bleeds out the happiness I've found
It's the promise of a story that's waiting to be told
It's the call to be listening when the heavens unfold

It's the wish of every honest soul
to read between the lines and feel the warmth in aching cold
to live life without the fear of losing your heart
but it's the cold reality that makes it all so hard
Did I lose my breath in this river of sun?
or is this a story that's only mean to be begun?

Re: Heartbeat

hi linusguitar this is a good start for your first song,nice lyrics,at the top of the page is a sticky post to explain how to post and format your songs,well done.....stay cool

love is life ,life is for love,keep a true heart and live life to the full....stay cool

Re: Heartbeat

Good writing Here sir,

How can we sing the sacred songs
before we've learned to really love

Thoses lines are thought provoking..

Are you going to record this ? I'd like to hear it played.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: Heartbeat

I would love to record this, and I will, but not yet. I need some good equipment, which is coming....

Thanks a lot though.

5 (edited by Russell_Harding 2010-04-01 03:33:23)

Re: Heartbeat

Linus very nice lyrics but the title is already taken by Buddy Holly back in late 1958 you may want to concider useing another name this is Buddy singing the song it most likely wont be anything like yours but the title is "heartbeat" smile

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TBoNwaQyCf8

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Re: Heartbeat

Hi Linus big_smile
Nice lyrics, you have me pondering about lots.. Well Done.
Hope you get your gear soon so we can hear it.

As Russ says the title is already in use but the good thing is that titles can't be copy written so you can use it...the question is would it bother you to have another song...( a pretty good song,Thanks Russ) with the same name and how would that affect it.

Kenny

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Re: Heartbeat

Yeah I'm not sure. I've never heard the song, and there are a lot of songwriting titles duplicated... I think I'll probably leave it. Cuz I love the title.

Re: Heartbeat

yea so did Buddy smile

"Growing old is not for sissies"