1 (edited by StranSongs 2010-03-21 09:15:05)

Topic: My Lost Song.

Actually I often spend more than a week at this !

My Lost Song.

You know I can spend
A week at this,
Crafting words
And music.
Love and loss,
Luck and lust,
Everything
That life is.

But still
I let you slip away
I looked
And you were gone.
You
Were my last muse.
You
Are my lost song.

I try to frame
The story-line
But it won't scan
And the words won't rhyme.
You're the hole
Within the song,
Without you
It's all gone wrong.

I can't find
The melody,
Match the rhythm
but not the key
The notes are right,
But not the feel.
All because
You're not with me.

You're the song
That wouldn't stay
You're the song
That walked away.
I'm the guy
You triple-crossed.
I'm the guy
Who paid the cost

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

Re: My Lost Song.

The right words can take what seems forever most times but when they're done and they fit it can be magical...like this piece. big_smile

"My Lost Song" Great title, I'm looking forwards to possibly...a recording?

Kenny

Just Keepin on Keepin on
Martin DC15E
Cort MR710F
Squire Strat (Chinese)

Re: My Lost Song.

hi stransongs, i think kenny has said it all there, this is an extraordinary piece, beautiful and tragic.

well done sir

phill

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: My Lost Song.

Wonderful !

I wish i could extract the song thats sits in the pit of my guts always.

Simple but brillliant again sir.

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: My Lost Song.

Well, I'm bowled over by the response- Thank you to everyone !

I've added a verse (see above) and now have a melody which I will record and post when it's complete.

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis