1 (edited by StranSongs 2009-12-01 13:15:04)

Topic: I can Feel the Frost Come.

Just trying to keep my hand in while the building work comes to an end ( maybe this week, maybe next ! Builders !)


I can Feel the Frost Come.

I can feel the frost come.
Like I can feel there's something wrong,
I can feel the cold night
Whle it's still warm, while it's still bright.
And I know just to look at you
That somethin' sure ain't right.

I watch you workin'
Away on down in the valley below.
See tiredness in your movement
Tryin' to catch the breathe you spent
I know just to look at you
That you need time to mend.

But there's no-one else.
None to lift the burden high.
The kids are all now up and gone,
The draught horse all but halt and done.
I know just to look at you
You won't close that gate for long.

Fences won't mend themselves,
Fallen walls succumb to moss
And latches on the byre door rust,
While you do just the things you must.
Sometimes the firewood takes all day
Yet lies in ashes in the morning mist.

And here's the hand I offered you
Warm beneath the saddle blanket
And there's the sass and pride that burnt
Across your face when help you spurned.
The land is mine when you are gone.
You thought I held your shroud, and turned.

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

Re: I can Feel the Frost Come.

very lovely!  Thank you for sharing!  you have a way with words

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Re: I can Feel the Frost Come.

if that's the result of just keeping your hand in....look out dylan thomas.

really deep and forces you to read the next line.

well done

phill

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: I can Feel the Frost Come.

I hope by now your building work has come to an end Sir.

May your writing never do so.  THIS IS A WONDERFUL PIECE .

As many kudos as i can muster .Its  so beautiful to read also.


Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !

Re: I can Feel the Frost Come.

it made me think of my father, who's been gone now a few years, winter always makes me sad, as the old people used to say, it's the death of the year. so i'm looking forward to spring, when the world comes once more to life.
thank you for this lovely winter tribute.

phill

ps, this is so good i read it twice and commented twice also

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: I can Feel the Frost Come.

Thanks for the thoughtful comments.

I suppose we all think of parents and grandparents around this time of year. Sad, but golden memories, watching your own slow down just as you watched your parents watch their parents slow down.

Been thinking a lot about family lately. The 1911 census of Ireland has just been released ( http://www.census.nationalarchives.ie/ ) and I went rummaging around to find my grandparents - which I did. That lead to a dip into family history which culminated in a trip to Rossinver in Lietrim and a visit to my Great-great-great grandfather's house which now stands in ruins overlooking Lough Melvin.

I've cracked the melody for this, and I'm working on the lyrics again for a better fit.

Hope you all had a spirited Xmas - I did !

"Don't play what's there, play what's not there." Miles Davis

Re: I can Feel the Frost Come.

Once again Stran, lovely stuff....deep, thoughtful, moving, lovely; very much enjoyed it! Please continue to share your wonderful talent with us! ~T