All Alone

Hey I'm Jared I'm 13 and i wanted to share my song with you guys.

All Alone
E                 G                D                         C
Life is short, life is sweet, but we all have to go
E                  G                           D                         C
His life is old, but hes still young, but he cant take it back
E                            G                     D Dm9 C
He wishes he could, but we all know, its to late
E                      G                       D             C
His father yells, his mother cries, open the gates

E                     G                         D                C
Hes four-teen, the drug is strong, hes growing weak
E                            G             D                       C
The drugs a fighter, hes a lier, who would have known
E                        G                       D   Dm9   C
Its eight o'clock, hes having a talk, with his dealer
E                      G                          D               C
Its nine o'clock, hes taking a walk, back to his house

E                           G            D                         C
Hes back at home, all alone, theres bags on the lawn
E                       G                           D                             C
He steps in-side, his mothers crying, and his fathers drunk again
E                    G                            D    Dm9    C
Hes still high, knows nothing about, how hes passing-out
E                                G                    D                  C
Now its eleven o'clock, hes waking up, its a hospital room
E     G    D    C      C
And hes all alone

So there it is please comment, give me some ideas, its my first song so whatever