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Topic: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

My first song... I'll try to record it soon.

Viry's Song Liam Cleary (me)


tempo: 160, 4/4 time




INTRO:


[E] [G][D] [D4] [D]x2




[E]When I talk to [G]you I’m in a [A5]whole new world,


[E]I suddenly [G]feel [D]free.


[E]Right now you’re the [G]only thing [D]on my mind,


[E]I only wanted [A]you to see




Bridge:




[A]It’s impossible to say with [G]words


[A]How much you [G]mean to me,


[F#]But I’ll try to express just [G]how I feel through this


[B]melody




[A]We both know we’re so [D]good [E]together,


[A]I only hope we can love each [D]other [E]forever,


[A]And we both know we’re so [D]good [E]together,


[A]The words of your song will live on [D]forever____.


Verse 2:





[E] [G] [A5] x2




[E]You’re the most [G]beautiful sight I’ve [A5]ever known,


[E]And you make [G]me laugh, [D]too.


[E]I would do [G]anything to [A5]make you smile,


[E]So is there [A]something else you want me to do?


[A]It’s impossible to say with [G]words


[A]How much you [G]mean to me,


[F#]But I’ll try to express just [G]how I feel through this


[B]melody


[A]We both know we’re so [D]good [E]together,


[A]I only hope we can love each [D]other [E]forever,


[A]And we both know we’re so [D]good [E]together,


[A]The words of your song will live on [D]forever____.


Chorus with key change:




[D]We both [G]know we’re so [A]good together,


[D]I only hope we can [G]love each [A]other forever,


[D]And we both know we’re so [G]good to[A]gether,


[D]The words of Viry’s [G]song will live on forever____.







not bad for a beginner, hm? tongue
please give some comments about what you thought, and ways of improving

thanks!

Liam

PS: sorry if the format doesn't work 100% well, it's the first time i've tried using it.

don't ever stand aside, don't ever be denied
you gotta be who you be if you're comin' with me
cool
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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Oh, and I play D/G slightly differently from on the diagram.

I meant:

e- 3
B- 3
G- 2
D- 0
A- x
E- x

don't ever stand aside, don't ever be denied
you gotta be who you be if you're comin' with me
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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

hi liam  it  has a nice flow and the lyrics are well written well done...stay cool

love is life ,life is for love,keep a true heart and live life to the full....stay cool

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
big_smile

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Hi 0)==#paranormal guitar.

This is really excellent.. First try? BRAVO!

I also Love your Irish Name of " Liam"

Take a Bow youngman.

Old Doll

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

hi liam, hope you dont mind if i call you that, your handles a bit long?

first attempt, look out lennon.

ps A5?

phill

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Phill Williams wrote:

hi liam, hope you dont mind if i call you that, your handles a bit long?

first attempt, look out lennon.

ps A5?

phill

thanks for your comment! smile

and what's wrong with A5? hmm it works, honest

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Liam,

I was not going to come and look at this since you wanted people too lol
but i couldnt help myself.
OK, want the truth now? I love dishing out the truth.
I think it is great!!
So, ok, it is another love song and so many love songs are repeating the same words to a different tune in a round about way, but very very good on your first song.
And I do like a good love song now and then.

well done,
now go do more.

Ken

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Old Doll wrote:

Hi 0)==#paranormal guitar.

This is really excellent.. First try? BRAVO!

I also Love your Irish Name of " Liam"

Take a Bow youngman.

thanks very much, i appreciate your comment smile
i need to practice it for Viry now though sad that'll be scary...

and i only call myself "liam" now because "William" (my real name) ends in it, and i'm a fan of Liam Gallagher

don't ever stand aside, don't ever be denied
you gotta be who you be if you're comin' with me
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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

upyerkilt wrote:

OK, want the truth now? I love dishing out the truth.
I think it is great!!

wahooo thanks Ken! smile

now she better flippin like it lol

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11 Reply by arkady (edited by arkady 2008-03-31 16:56:28)

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Hi liam or Will?
I've had a look and play of your song as far as it goes. First attempt and it's not bad all.
All the right senitments for a love song nicely personalised at the end not a bad thing when writing a love song to a girl friend (Though the Name can be easily changed if required lol) don't take offence.
Like all songs lyrics and chords are only part of the picture. Melody is something you can only show when the song is recorded. I see you have said you intend to record soon. I for one would like to hear how you intend the melody to go.
A little thing the D/G chord is as you show the finger placements is a D4 chord.
Well Done
Ark

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

thanks arkady
(it's liam now, i got bored of will)

i'm glad you thought highly of it! smile
i won't dissapoint when i record, i'm sure. i don't think i'll need to change the name, either. i hope so, anyway...

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you gotta be who you be if you're comin' with me
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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Just tried your song Liam, I like it well done.

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Hi Liam,

Very good first attempt at a song I am sure that Viry will be over the moon, and I am really looking forward to hearing your recording of it in the not too distant future. Well done young sir,

Roger

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

thankyou arkady and roger smile

and i'll be honest, i'm not looking forward to the singing part of recording it, but i'm determined to get it done.

don't ever stand aside, don't ever be denied
you gotta be who you be if you're comin' with me
cool
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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Hi Liam,

Mike shyness is normal and natural, even with only you in the room, but it gets easier the more you do it. Remember no one is expecting a Liam Gallagher performance but it is great to hear the intended melody of a song, you can only do your best and that is all anyone expects.

Roger

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

Just for the record, I liked it too!  A5?

cool

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Re: "Viry's Song" by Liam Cleary

bonedaddy wrote:

Just for the record, I liked it too!  A5?

cool

thankyou for commenting, glad you liked it! big_smile
and what about A5?

argh i just realised i've missed part of the song out. never mind i've edited it 5 times already i'm not doing it again xD.

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