Topic: I little help would be appreciated..
So I have this song i wrote over the last few days, got the music figgered out and everything, but I need a little help deciding what order to put the verses in.... or even if i should call it done yet? Maybe James or somebody could take a look and tell me what they think: (Its a rockish type song done with those power chord thingys)
VERSE SET 1:
I think the devil knows my name
He shouts it from the rooftop in the howlin' rain
I laughed at the devil and the floodwaters came
And I think he remembers my name
I think I gave away my name
When I looked in his eyes and I aint never been the same
I know its my own fault and I shouldn't complain
But I think he wrote a number by my name
VERSE SET2:
I seen the devil he's alive and well
He looks kind of like heaven but he smelled like hell
I hear him callin' me just a ringing his bell
But I know the answer too well
I heard him singing his song
Sayin' "Come on children wont you sing along?''
He'll tell you he's an angel but that dont last long
And there aint no way to move on
THEN THESE TWO THAT DONT REALLY GO TOGETHER:
I think the devil laughs out loud
Everytime he sees me in a crowd
I think he likes to watch me get knowcked down
Yeah I think he laughs out loud
AND
I chased the devil down to watch him die
He had a hollow look around his sunken eyes
He seemed dissapointed that I didnt cry
But then again I think I understand why
ANyway some good advice is what I need, maybe someone has an idea. Thanks in advance,
LR