• From: denmark.
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 5

Topic: Like to show this song.

Hi.

Heres and song i right about a year ago like to hear what you think about it.


Standing on a higway bridge

lokking out to se you come

we have plan a date

and now you werry late

hope you still remeber

how we met in september


Standing on a bridge

over higway fiftysix

roses in my hand

BABA im just a man

hoping to se you come


Manny peopel pass me by

maby the thing im cuiside

every one smile and say

whay you standing here to day

i do not remember

hope the just pas me by


Now its just begin to rain

and i fill a heartaeg pain

you will newer come

and that just no fun

standing on my bridge

filling you to big a bitch.


I now its not spell corret but i dont right i englis ewery day i from Denmark.


Kim. <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_cool.gif" border=0 alt="Cool">

  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 10

Re: Like to show this song.

Hey Kim, Im happy to find other Europeans here, Im from Germany.

I think the story you tell has a certain something, so with a little work on spelling and in some lines on grammar its quite a fine text, I think. Better than what comes into my mind in any case.


Keep going

Sebastian


Edit: Apostrophies did not work, stupid different keyboard standards!

  • From: denmark.
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 5

Re: Like to show this song.

Hey Sebastian.

Thanks for the nice words Great to hear other like it  <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_biggrin.gif" border=0 alt="Very Happy"> I have been making songs all my life in my head its just the last years i got it on paper and play them on my gitar.Most off my songs are in dannis so i dont think you wood understand them.


Have a nice day.


KIM. <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_smile.gif" border=0 alt="Smile">

  • Registered: 2006-10-11
  • Posts: 12

Re: Like to show this song.

Hey Kim!  I'm not of European blood,(directly), but i really liked your song.  I hope that you can keep your enthusiasm for writing, and don't give up just because people say your no good <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_biggrin.gif" border=0 alt="Very Happy">  I really liked it, and i hope others do to.

  • From: Starkville, Mississippi USA
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 2,069

Re: Like to show this song.

Hello killian - that is a great song.  Would love to hear you sing & lay it sometime.  Wish that I could show you a song that I wrote in Danish, but I just haven't written that song just yet!


Here are your lyrics with spelling corrections - - - I hope you don't mind, I just want to help.


Standing on a highway bridge

Looking out to see you come

We had planned a date

And now you're very late

Hope you still remember

How we met in September


Standing on a bridge

Over Highway Fiftysix

Roses in my hand

Baby I'm just a man

Hoping to see you come


Many people pass me by

Maybe thinking I'm a suicide

People smile and say

'Why are standing here today?'

I do not remember

Hope they just pass me by


Now it just began to rain

And I feel a heart ache pain

You will never come

And that is just no fun

Standing on my bridge

Feeling you're too big of a bitch


So, that is what I think you intend . . . maybe I'm wrong, but hey - it's a great song.

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  • Registered: 2006-08-15
  • Posts: 51

Re: Like to show this song.

Great job, even with the spelling issues.

I think it would be interesting to see a song written in your native language. I find songs written in other languages intriguing.

  • From: denmark.
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 5

Re: Like to show this song.

Hello here again been alonge time ago but better late than never.

Im just so glad to hear that some you like my tekst  <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_biggrin.gif" border=0 alt="Very Happy">  it was werry easy to rigt it but not easy to show it in here. Becorse i like it my self werry much but that dosent mean other peopel  does.

But its looks like im doing something just a littel bit rigt and thats so GREAT.


THANKS. <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_lol.gif" border=0 alt="Laughing">

  • From: denmark.
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 5

Re: Like to show this song.

Thanks for the Help its all most perfekt now..

  • Registered: 2006-03-04
  • Posts: 27

Re: Like to show this song.

i think its bad ass its a fu**ing awsome song

good job

                                        jesse kenyon