Topic: Thoughts of You

A scribbling in my mind
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.
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Thoughts of you,
I let them slip out
Or they let me let them
I'm not the one
Holding the reigns
I'm merely a decoy for them
A vessel,
A frail paper cup
Trying to hold the rain
These thoughts
Overrun amuck
Outpour, without constraints 

"I hide behind a mirror of knowledge, I'm never that what you see
It is my wisdom that emanates, and is perceived by you as me"

#penned #not_stolen

2 (edited by Peatle Jville 2024-11-12 08:00:36)

Re: Thoughts of You

Shivan, I like the way you write that from a feeling of vulnerability. Many good songs and poems have to come from a sense where do we belong in situations almost like an overthinking that most humans go through. So your words resonate and would connect with many in not a cliche way.. Sometimes I think when writing poems or songs about what we are feeling or our private thoughts  it's end goal should be to give the reader or the listener a license that it is alright to acknowledge they have had those feelings and thoughts also.