1 (edited by Peatle Jville 2024-10-02 23:33:59)

Topic: War Torn Calm

Here is my rough attempt at a poem song just with my guitar that I wrote.. Hope it makes sense.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e5dfAVSEGOY

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Here is my rough attempt at a poem song just with my guitar that I wrote.. Hope it makes sense.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e5dfAVSEGOY

It's a nice little poem; but one I wish didn't have to exist!!

Cheers

Richard     

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3 (edited by Peatle Jville 2024-10-05 04:36:04)

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Thank you Richard for taking the time to listen and comment. With hindsight I think that maybe I could have taken a more lighthearted comedic approach to my poem song monologue about being grateful to live in New Zealand. Maybe the Fred Dagg approach I should have taken here is his example attached below.     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AYvMeT2GC14

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Thank you Richard for taking the time to listen and comment. With hindsight I think that maybe I could have taken a more lighthearted comedic approach to my poem song monologue about being grateful to live in New Zealand. Maybe the Fred Dagg approach I should have taken here is his example attached below.     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AYvMeT2GC14

Hi,

Yep, I got that undertone of being lucky to be away from it, and it kind of reminded me of a post I saw on Facebook that went something like:


You don't like it over there,
So you come to live over here,
But don't bring your problems from over there,
To us living over here,
Because we never lived over there
...

That wasn't all of it, but catches the gist of it. Too many problems in the world today!! Most of them could be solved over a steak and beer!!

Cheers

Richard     

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Maybe the Fred Dagg approach I should have taken here is his example attached below.     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AYvMeT2GC14

Oddly enough - I remember this song ... was probably in the phase where I was hitting the pub quite a bit, and might have been on Rage early one morning ....

Cheers

Richard

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neophytte wrote:
Peatle Jville wrote:

Thank you Richard for taking the time to listen and comment. With hindsight I think that maybe I could have taken a more lighthearted comedic approach to my poem song monologue about being grateful to live in New Zealand. Maybe the Fred Dagg approach I should have taken here is his example attached below.     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AYvMeT2GC14

Hi,

Yep, I got that undertone of being lucky to be away from it, and it kind of reminded me of a post I saw on Facebook that went something like:


You don't like it over there,
So you come to live over here,
But don't bring your problems from over there,
To us living over here,
Because we never lived over there
...

That wasn't all of it, but catches the gist of it. Too many problems in the world today!! Most of them could be solved over a steak and beer!!

Cheers

Richard

Richard, beer and steak diplomacy I like that.     

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Richard, beer and steak diplomacy I like that.

https://thumbs.dreamstime.com/b/healthy-lean-grilled-medium-rare-steak-french-fries-beer-spice-rustic-pub-tavern-food-styling-68687850.jpg     

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I  liked  it Peatle  I  can hear  shades  of  Bob and  Lou   coming  through   ,well  written     

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Thank you, Grah I don't know who Bob and Lou are but I like the comment.  My monologue, with the guitar was a bit of an experiment in bringing ideas out using different threads that hopefully connect what I was thinking when hearing the world news on the radio the morning I wrote the lyrics.  Originally   started it as a straight-out poem that slowly built up into a feeling of apprehension but also in the hope like nature that things continually change and have seasons. The ups and downs and all the bumps in the road of life summed up in a couple of minutes with my guitar backing up the words.     

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Bob Dylan and Lou Reed     

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Deep and dark Pedr. Sorry I'm late reacting to this but I have been busy doing other stuff. At this moment that pic of steak and chips has got my juices flowing, though I'd rather have the steak cooked a little longer. Back to your song/poem; the world seems to have gone crazy once again. Why cant people see that trade and getting along is preferable to killing each other to gain a little ground. Or settling a two thousand year grudge with missiles and bullets! As Mr Lennon said, "GIVE PEACE A CHANCE" Wise words     

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Grah1 wrote:

Bob Dylan and Lou Reed

Thank you Grah now I know I have often thought that Dylan Reed would be a good name for a Band or a stage name for somebody.     

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Phill Williams wrote:

Deep and dark Pedr. Sorry I'm late reacting to this but I have been busy doing other stuff. At this moment that pic of steak and chips has got my juices flowing, though I'd rather have the steak cooked a little longer. Back to your song/poem; the world seems to have gone crazy once again. Why cant people see that trade and getting along is preferable to killing each other to gain a little ground. Or settling a two thousand year grudge with missiles and bullets! As Mr Lennon said, "GIVE PEACE A CHANCE" Wise words

Cheers Piri
I am a bit of a medium to well done steak man. Good old John Lennon had it right when it came to Peace. Over the years due to my involvement with a lot of war vets I have also seen the way good people have been left with horrible impacts after been involved with war conflicts. I will attach a short video of me talking to a war vet friend of mine Ray about it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wGMUcZTeOBk     

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Here is my rough attempt at a poem song just with my guitar that I wrote.. Hope it makes sense.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e5dfAVSEGOY

I liked your poem song Peatle, I think many people are wondering about this world of ours right now.     

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15 (edited by Peatle Jville 2024-10-10 02:17:03)

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Jandle wrote:
Peatle Jville wrote:

Here is my rough attempt at a poem song just with my guitar that I wrote.. Hope it makes sense.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e5dfAVSEGOY

I liked your poem song Peatle, I think many people are wondering about this world of ours right now.

Cheers Jan there is a lot of turmoil in the world. I just am thankful and feel blessed to be where I am at the moment. Having said that without feeling apprehensive I realise that we have to enjoy and treasure the moment when things are good because all roads have bumps in them. As many of the buskers around town tell me it is tough out there at the moment but despite that you have to remain positive. I will attach a busker talking to me about that here.
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PjxB-LGwRMk

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Peatle Jville wrote:
Jandle wrote:
Peatle Jville wrote:

Here is my rough attempt at a poem song just with my guitar that I wrote.. Hope it makes sense.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e5dfAVSEGOY

I liked your poem song Peatle, I think many people are wondering about this world of ours right now.

Cheers Jan there is a lot of turmoil in the world. I just am thankful and feel blessed to be where I am at the moment. Having said that without feeling apprehensive I realise that we have to enjoy and treasure the moment when things are good because all roads have bumps in them. As many of the buskers around town tell me it is tough out there at the moment but despite that you have to remain positive. I will attach a busker talking to me about that here.
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PjxB-LGwRMk

He has a documentary about him too: https://www.imdb.com/title/tt4255330/

Cheers

RIchard     

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17 (edited by Peatle Jville 2024-10-14 22:49:52)

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Cheers Richard ,  King Homeboy is a big guy with a big heart he also is a actor a short story writer a M C among many other things that should be an interesting Doco when it comes out.  I will attach a short  doco about his backstory and some of his early life struggles made back in 2015 here just in case anyone is interested.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uHsUdc3ISKg

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Peatle Jville wrote:

Cheers Richard ,  King Homeboy is a big guy with a big heart he also is a actor a short story writer a M C among many other things that should be an interesting Doco when it comes out.  I will attach a short  doco about his backstory and some of his early life struggles made back in 2015 here just in case anyone is interested.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uHsUdc3ISKg

I think the doco you have and the one I have are one and the same smile

Cheers

Richard     

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Cheers Richard when I clicked on your link it didn't take me to the documentary just a synopsis about King Homeboy without me being able to access it. So it could be the same one as the one on YouTube that I put my link to .