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Topic: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Hi all,

We have a dozen words to choose from this month as suggested by our members:

electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt, kidney, do, donor, bedroom, brake, citizen

With these words, our members can write a poem, create a song or cover somebody else's song which include any or all of those words  and remember to make a suggestion for the upcoming November FSOTM.

Go ahead and make some awesome music!! Looking forward to hearing it!

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

To get the ball rolling for this month here is a song I wrote Different Layers.   
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TrqpFCzrLOw     

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Peatle Jville wrote:

To get the ball rolling for this month here is a song I wrote Different Layers.   
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TrqpFCzrLOw

Your writing is getting very poignant ...  I like it!!

Cheers

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Thank you, Richard, for taking the time to have a listen and give me some feedback. I hope some more people have a go at this month's FSOTM.     

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

This video is one of the gigs I did at Wanneroo Folk club, and starts with "Light my Fire" - which has the words "funeral pyre" in the second verse:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m1V5ZMa9CAQ

Cheers

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6 Reply by Peatle Jville (edited by Peatle Jville 2023-10-12 20:07:59)

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Good one Richard was that the audience singing along on Light My Fire that I could hear on the video or was it an echo in the hall??? Your two originals very strong songs rhythmically and lyrically also.

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Peatle Jville wrote:

Good one Richard was that the audience singing along on Light My Fire that I could hear on the video or was it an echo in the hall??? Your two originals very strong songs rhythmically and lyrically also.

Hi Peatle,

Thanks for having a listen; they were singing along (it's a pretty common practice for well known songs there!).

Cheers

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Peatle Jville wrote:

To get the ball rolling for this month here is a song I wrote Different Layers.   
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TrqpFCzrLOw

I liked that one Peatle, very much how many of us were feeling re voting this year and who for this time around.  I could relate to your lyrics in this song.  I like how you put your thoughts to song.  Nicely done smile     

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neophytte wrote:

This video is one of the gigs I did at Wanneroo Folk club, and starts with "Light my Fire" - which has the words "funeral pyre" in the second verse:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m1V5ZMa9CAQ

Cheers

Richard

Good to hear the audience joining in with you in your first song Richard.  Always satisfying when the crowd does that, makes it all worthwhile.   Nice to hear your originals too.   That last song you definitely were getting into it, well done smile     

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Jandle wrote:
Peatle Jville wrote:

To get the ball rolling for this month here is a song I wrote Different Layers.   
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TrqpFCzrLOw

I liked that one Peatle, very much how many of us were feeling re voting this year and who for this time around.  I could relate to your lyrics in this song.  I like how you put your thoughts to song.  Nicely done smile

Thank you, Jan.  As I get older my cynicism grows every time  I hear a politician speak. I often wonder is the real truth being fed to us or is it being obscured by irrelevant or misleading information. How much is truth how much is propaganda.     

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

This   one  has the  word brake  in one  verse  .It  is  based  on true  events  from the  late  60s  .I  wrote  it  after  I  lost  a  friend  .Riverside  cafe   closed  around  1970 and  was  demolished  ,A modern motel now  stands  on the  site .     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I1_oR4YZFSM   Riverside  Cafe .
This  go's  out  to  Glen RIP .

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Jandle wrote:

Good to hear the audience joining in with you in your first song Richard.  Always satisfying when the crowd does that, makes it all worthwhile.   Nice to hear your originals too.   That last song you definitely were getting into it, well done smile

Thanks for having a listen ... I'm hoping to do some longer gigs this year, but it's already October and I haven't yet ... still time, I guess smile

Cheers

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Grah1 wrote:

This   one  has the  word brake  in one  verse  .It  is  based  on true  events  from the  late  60s  .I  wrote  it  after  I  lost  a  friend  .Riverside  cafe   closed  around  1970 and  was  demolished  ,A modern motel now  stands  on the  site .     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I1_oR4YZFSM   Riverside  Cafe .
This  go's  out  to  Glen RIP .

That's a good song - I take it that it was pretty new to the band at the time, hope you get to record it. Doing dumb things when we were young ... I guess we've all been there ...

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14 Reply by Peatle Jville (edited by Peatle Jville 2023-10-17 05:21:57)

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Grah1 wrote:

This   one  has the  word brake  in one  verse  .It  is  based  on true  events  from the  late  60s  .I  wrote  it  after  I  lost  a  friend  .Riverside  cafe   closed  around  1970 and  was  demolished  ,A modern motel now  stands  on the  site .     
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I1_oR4YZFSM   Riverside  Cafe .
This  go's  out  to  Glen RIP .

Grah, that is a good song. It takes me back to the days here in NZ when many young Kiwis rode British bikes.
If you owned a Norton Commando here back then you had a much sort after bike due to them costing a bit more than other bikes. Milk-bar cowboys or bodgies who owned motorbikes was the name many of the young rebellious ones were known as here.

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

This is a re-post from songwriting  - try to get a recording here sometime this week.

I qualify bc I used the word " do"   smile

I wrote this over coffee this morning.  One of my friends is having marital problems, and this just popped into words as I was having coffee.

Most likely not perfect - but here it is

Darling, I Keep Hoping That I'm Wrong By Jim Kenyon


[Am] My eyes are so tired, yet I can't sleep at night.


my [E] mind starts racing, when I [Am]turn out the light.


[Am] oh this room is so dark, but I can clearly see,


that [E] you're not coming back, to [Am] be here with me?


.




Chorus


.




[Dm] you said that we’d always [Am] be together


and I [Dm] gave you all my [Am] heart


[Dm]you promised me that you’d [Am]never leave


But [E] Darling , ya’ know we’re falling a [Am] part


.


Verse 2


.




[Am]Remember the good times, oh, the memories we share


But [E]now it feels like you [Am]don’t even care


[Am] I’m sure “never hurt you baby”, were the words you said


But [E]now my heart’s aching, and I’m [Am]feeling ‘bout half past dead


.




Chorus


.




[Dm]should’ve known this was [Am] coming


the [Dm] writing was on the [Am] wall


[Dm]guess it was happening [Am] all along



But [E] Darling, I keep hoping that I’m [Am] wrong


.


Verse 3


.




[Am] So what do we do now, where do we go from here


the [E] look in your eyes betrays you, and mine [Am] are filled with tears


[Am] can my heart trust you, will your love be true ?


I [E] don’t know the answer but I [Am] know, I still love you


.




Chorus


.




[Dm] don't know where this is [Am] gonna fall


I[Dm] don't have any answers at [Am] all


[Dm] don’t know if you'll be [Am] gone forever.


But [E] Darling, forgetting you will be [Am] never.




Chorus  ( repeated)


.




[Dm]should’ve known this [Am] was coming


the [Dm] writing was on the [Am] wall


[Dm]guess it was happening [Am] all along


But [E] Darling, I keep hoping that I’m [Am] wrong




Yeah , [E] Darling, I keep hoping that I’m [Am] wrong


[E] Darling, I keep hoping that I’m [Am] wrong


Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

TIGLJK wrote:

This is a re-post from songwriting  - try to get a recording here sometime this week.

I qualify bc I used the word " do"   smile

I wrote this over coffee this morning.  One of my friends is having marital problems, and this just popped into words as I was having coffee.

Most likely not perfect - but here it is

Look forward to hearing it!!

Cheers

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Here's one I did almoat 3 (!) years ago - "Love will tear us apart" by Joy Division - with the line "... why is the bedroom so cold ..."

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e1eOcaMGK9U

Enjoy!

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

Jim, your lyrics tell it good and many will feel they are about their own relationship breakdown. The sleepiness  and that feeling bout half past dead.

Richard it is good to have you put another song on here from you. You cover a wide range of genres it's good to see that you don't limit yourself to one style. .     

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Grah1, nicely performed by you all.  Good to see your writing skills as well with this one.  You're all looking very relaxed and comfortable as you perform. 

TIGLJK, another nicely written song by you, I wish I had your talent to write songs so easily as it seems for you. 

neophytte, I agree with Peatle, you can certainly perform a variety of genre`s, a good skill to have.     

On another note, I haven't entered anything yet as I am getting over a cold which has had me coughing.  So hopefully I will be over it before this month's FSOTM ends.

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Jandle wrote:

On another note, I haven't entered anything yet as I am getting over a cold which has had me coughing.  So hopefully I will be over it before this month's FSOTM ends.

Hope you feel better soon!! We always take our health for granted, until it's not there ...

Thanks for listening to my song!

Cheers

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

TIGLJK wrote:

This is a re-post from songwriting  - try to get a recording here sometime this week.

I qualify bc I used the word " do"   smile

I wrote this over coffee this morning.  One of my friends is having marital problems, and this just popped into words as I was having coffee.

Most likely not perfect - but here it is

Darling, I Keep Hoping That I'm Wrong By Jim Kenyon


[Am] My eyes are so tired, yet I can't sleep at night.


my [E] mind starts racing, when I [Am]turn out the light.


[Am] oh this room is so dark, but I can clearly see,



that [E] you're not coming back, to [Am] be here with me?



Adding the link to the topic that contains the Soundcloud recording of this song:

https://www.chordie.com/forum/viewtopic.php?id=39207

Cheers

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Nice one TIGLJK, I had a listen and really like it.     

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Re: October 2023 FSOTM: electron, delicate, layers, funeral, linen, exempt

The room was filled with a soft humming, much like the quiet flow of an electron through a wire—unseen, yet powerful. My gaze rested on the delicate linen draped across the casket, a striking contrast to the heavy emotions that burdened the room. Funerals always seemed to involve layers—layers of grief, memories, and the inevitable unraveling of the past.