• Registered: 2007-09-08
  • Posts: 1

Topic: My Beautiful (No chords yet)

VERSE 1:

She's Got problems
She's Just trying to make it through
I wish that i could comfort her
i wish that she could see that i knew
what she's going through, i understand
she shouldn't have to meet this harsh demand
She deserves better...

CHORUS:

She says that no one cares
that no one understands
i only wish that i could let her know
i care so much and
shes so beautiful, so beautiful
but she thinks otherwise
She's so beautiful, so beautiful
Yet she listens to the lies
God, someone save her
She doesnt desrve to die
on the inside, it just doesnt seem right
Shes so beautiful, so beautiful
but she thinks otherwise
She's so beautiful so beautiful
I cant let her listen to the lies

VERSE 2:

Shes got friends but
she wonders if they care
i wish that i could comfort her
i wish she could know that i
will be there for her,
ill be there till the end
She shouldt have to think
that i don't understand
I'll give her better...

CHORUS:

She says that no one cares,
that no one understands
i only wish that i could let her know
i care so much and
shes so beautiful so beautiful
but she thinks otherwise
shes so beautiful so beautiful
yet she listens to those lies
God, someone save her
she doesn't deserve to die
on the inside
it just doesn't seem right
she's so beautiful, so beautiful
but she still thinks otherwise
shes so beautiful so beautiful
I'll take away the lies

Bridge:

She says that no one ever cared, or gave a shit at all
Why cant she understand that, I'll help her break the fall

[PIANO] She's so beautiful, so beautiful
she deserves a better end
She's so beautiful, so beautiful
her broken heart i'll mend [PIANO END]

CHORUS:

She says that no one cares
that no one understands
i only wish that i could let her know
i care so much and
she's so beautiful so beautiful
but she thinks otherwise
shes so beautiful so beautiful
why does she listen to the lies?
God, someone save her
she doesnt deserve this death
on the inside, i know you'll say it isnt right
shes so beautiful so beautiful
but she thinks otherwise
shes so beautiful so beautiful
i wont let her listen to the lies

[PIANO UNTIL END]

She is so beautiful, much to beautiful to lie
Shes more than beautiful, this i wont deny
i won't let her keep beating herself up
ill help her get back upon her feet
ill die for her, be there till the end
because she is my beautiful, my beautiful...

end. So ya tell me what you think, if youve got any advise to make it better thatd be great.

  • From: Almancil, Algarve, Portugal
  • Registered: 2006-09-02
  • Posts: 6,205

Re: My Beautiful (No chords yet)

Hello B.E.S.,

I think you have a good basis for a song there but obviously you need to do some work and put chords to it.

I do feel however that with such a long chorus, repeating it three times will make it too long and be a little repetitive, but you will find that out when you put music to it. Well done.

Thank you,

Roger

"Do, or do not; there is no try"

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  • Registered: 2007-04-03
  • Posts: 3,489

Re: My Beautiful (No chords yet)

Hi Bloods eternal scars

I read this song much earlier today! And kept it with me! over and over in my head! I was driving and it still went around in my head!
I  would love to hear this whole piece on piano! if this is possible i will get my
nephew to play it for me!

DO ME A FAVOUR AND TELL HER!  IF SHE IS REAL! SOMETIMES A KIND WORD IS ALL WE NEED TO DRAG US  FROM A DARK PLACE!

Thank you,

Old Doll.

Why Blend in with the Crowd ? When you were made to stand out !