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Rhyme
i`ve been having a conversation
about my observation
about rhyme
should it happen all the time
you say yes i say no
one of these days
i`ll change my ways
but on reflection
and at your direction
perhaps i`ll write more rhymes
or maybe i won`t
Bravo!! Excellent job of conveying an idea in a just few short lines. No wasted words, very concise expression of thoughts done in an AABBC rhyming pattern. It would be an great start for a song IMO.
Brian you are a Zion
Your mind is a lion
Made me laugh till I'm cryin'
I bet the ladies are sighin'
In the shops they stopped buyin'
Your words were not lyin'
May your pen never run out of ink
Brian
Let's not confuse poetry with just a rhyme
similar sounds, with thoughts sublime
June and Moon and Fox in the box
alliteration, metaphors, and paradox
Cat and Rat, Free as the Sea
not meter, not octave, nor simile
a man from Nantucket, and sometimes worse
hyperbole, litotes, Shakespeare's blank verse
it's all good, whatever you choose
as long as you're writing, you can't lose
if you're wondering how this will end
it's two sestets, sans iambic pentameter, sans couplet !
Keep on keeping on my friend !
Jim
love it love it,great conversation
Brian if you run out of ink.
I will turn to drink.
Oh man .
That wasn't my plan.
To write words that stink.
I hope y'all will forgive me for hijacking this thread, but my friend Jeff Hartley, singer/songwriter extraordinaire and master of rhymes, near rhymes, inner rhymes and alliteration was recorded playing this nonsensical song he wrote at an open mic several years ago. My grandkids thought it was the greatest song ever written and ran around my house singing the chorus after they heard it.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PakJiyEySsg
Brilliant, I can see why your kids could sing the chorus. Thanks for posting this tallented performer.
Good one Ken kids here in NZ would love that song.
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