Topic: folk song

Thought i`d have a go at writing a traditional folk song using traditional themes.
Not sure if it`s working,but here goes.

We cast off at dawn
on the morning tide
as we sail off
on that november day
leaving the blue
for the cold and the gray
heading south
to that x on our map
with only our hopes
and sextant to show the way
eight days out
the weather it turned
the waves grew higher
and the sea it churned
with sails destroyed
by the vicious wind
stores lost overboard
to the angry sea
leaving us adrift
and praying to god 

The King Of Audio Torture

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having seen (on TV) the waves in the southern ocean i cant believe that fishermen actually go out to sea.
you have written a great story and i wonder if you have finished? there must be a rescue?     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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exactly the same thoughts as Phill


What the heck happens ???     

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EB good lyrics about the treachery of the sea at times..

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Your lyrics evoke great imagery of going to sea. Someone must have survived to tell the tale/write the song, so does the story continue?     

I want to read my own water, choose my own path, write my own songs

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Good point guys,never thought about that,. i wrote us and we
but this is all that was dropped out sky to me,so i guess thats all.
i guess we will all have to imagine our own ending.
i could write an ending,but that would be me writing,not the magic
thing that just drops out of the sky into our laps.you other writers know what i mean.     

The King Of Audio Torture

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yes you are right Brian. the first part is easy it's all there at your fingertips, but the resolution/ending is where the hard work begins and the magic dries up. all that matters is that you are happy with it as is....     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.