1 (edited by Peatle Jville 2020-08-15 00:33:07)

Topic: Bar Room Couple

Just me writing about a local bar.. I like to to put my experience of every day real Kiwi life into words hope it works.


                                                 Bar Room Couple.

Boy and girl sitting at the bar.

She pulls out her phone.

Drowning out a quiet guitar playing at the bar.

Her voice travels across the room.

“Lets put our selfie on Facebook”.

A quick little snappy are they bored or are they happy.

Why do  they need their face on cyberspace.

Are their minds in this space or another place.

Is multi tasking while talking to each other.

A new way of dating and mating.

Are new apps updating looking to grab more of their time.

Are they in love with each other.

Or are they looking for another.

Texting looking at their devices.

Nattering and chattering.

While taking little sips from flash cocktails.

On the other side of the bar beers in pints.

There is me and my mate talking lost in debate.

I look at the time.

I need to shoot through.

Got other things to do

The young couple catch my eye as I am preparing to say goodbye.

Raise their glasses high.

Wishing me good health

Enquiring of them. I  ask,“ Are you having a good day”?

He says” yes” and with a big smile she shrieks “this day has been the best.”

“My boyfriend  asked me to marry him and I said yes.”

I drain my uplifted glass in a salute.

Wish them God Bless and all the best.

Re: Bar Room Couple

Love the way you match the natural with entertaining verse. I'm surprised you missed all the under thirties with their mobiles charging at every outlet in the place? That's a great twist at the end.     

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: Bar Room Couple

That is way cool!  Great observation ending on an uplifting experience. Way to go Peatle !!

Love it !

Jim     

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Bar Room Couple

P
you have a great way of making the ordinary entertaining.
we don`t need to make stuff up,it`s all just sitting in front
of us to be observed,and written about.     

The King Of Audio Torture

Re: Bar Room Couple

well said EB ! That's what I was trying to say - you nailed it!

Congrats Peatle     

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

6 (edited by Peatle Jville 2020-08-12 07:06:29)

Re: Bar Room Couple

Cheers Phill the under thirties seem to be addicted to their smartphones. The smartphone battery gone flat is a major life threatening crises for many young ones.
Jim and EB I enjoy watching people doing everyday things. I wonder if in twenty years time if the young ones will  still be addicted to their smartphones ?
Thank you guys for your feedback as I know my stuff doesn't always work it is  always good to hear your thoughts. Hopefully my way of writing about everyday things doesn't bore people.