The hell you put me through- lyrycs that need chords

Ah yes went and worked out kind of a chord base for this song,
Its a littel crazy which is why the words don't seem to work out quite right but they actually do fit in there.... Its got kind of a willie nelsonish type rhythym going where you hold on to the chord for a few seconds before singing the next line in a place or two. Another thing is when you're singing there's certain words you hold onto too.... Lets see heres an example (Im gonna write it in G but im not really sure what key i want to put it in yet)

VERSE

G
Well it aint right (this word is longer),
                                        C
This hell that you put me through(hold)
      D
Ive lost my mind trying to figger
                        G
What I oughta do(hold)
      C
I'm tired of you're talking

And I'm bout done walking
             G
back to you(hold)
                                                        D      (now hang onto this one a minute)
While you're busy throwin on more fuel
                                                                                      G
To this hell(hold on just a little while) that you put me through

CHORUS:

         C
Yeah I'm done pretendin'(hold)
                                G         (now hold onto this but not as long as you did the D)
That I can't see the flames(hold)
          D
Don't  think you can fool me
                                                       G       (hold on just a sec right here)
Cuz you've already made it pretty plain
        C
That I(hold a bit)  aint worth tryin'
                                             G
To be(hold a bit) around to you(hold)
             D
And it's just about killed me
                                                                 G
This hell(little bit longer) that you put me through

I guess thats kind of confusing lol But anyway you're probly right about needing to size em down a little bit. Its still a pretty unfinished piece of work. Im working out the tune though so it'll be dressed up before too long

All You Need is Love

Hi Last Rebel - Dandy lyric about a miserable thing to go through.  I would make it a 12-bar blues because the tag line 'The hell you put me through' and the variations you use of that same idea are absolutely perfect for the endings of blues verses.  A few very minor alterations in some lines and you've got a real gutsy blues thing going on . . . .
James

I got a Waylon feel right away, played in E. Waylon is never really very far from the blues anyhow. I like what I've got so far, but I've only figured out the one verse. I'll try to work it up and send it to you in a few days.
I'll "doctor" the lyrics too if you don't mind, I see some places where it really doesn't fall off my tongue like it should, but very good all-in-all. You can always throw it out if you don't like what I do. 

hmmm......... well i'd be interested in seeing the music definitely. As far as the lyrycs go its not bad,  i like the shortened verses but i might have to play with them a bit more I like the waylon feel though and actually when i started playing around with it yesterday i kept it in E myself.
  Hate to be a stickler on a few of the lines but understand there are a few hidden personal winks and nods towards certain people who might need to get the message if you know what i mean.
   For instance you wrote that 'you just started losin' cuz im doin' the choosin' this time'.... See the thing is the anonymous person to whom this song is adressed tends to look at things this way,  "I want this but if I choose you I can't have it, but on the other hand I don't want to feel guilty...", so to them choosing me over thier next fiasco would mean losing what they want but at the same time if they don't choose me (and usually they don't... in fact they NEVER do....) when they come down off the high mood they end up feeling miserably guilty. Thats why I wrote 'don't worry about losing' because THIS time I'm the one choosing not to go with them, so they don't have to lose what they want or feel guilty..... anyway this is all from personal life experience so trust me they'd know what it means.

Anyway I think you did a great job 'boiling it down', so If I may I'll just see what I can do with it and we'll meet somewhere in the middle (about WHICH lines to use not the length because you're absolutely right its way too long).

All You Need is Love

Hey Last Rebel,
Just played your song and thought it was brilliant.  Well done.  Actually I posted this because since I played it, I have been humming it to myself.  Now that's got to be a sign of a good song!  Well Done.  Keep it going.

Ilike your song alot,I agree with james it would sound good if you do it with a blues feeling.I played it in e7 a7 and b7.kind of like eric claptons acustic version of crossroads.It sounded good.you may want too shorten the song a little,also you can mix those chords around a bit and do some thfinger and thumb picking.      good luck

I hear that as a pretty up tempo ditty in a 12 or 16 bar blues format.   Another nice one!

WRT getting it stolen,  she has copyright on the song the instant she wrote it down.   Presumably, that would be at 2007-09-01 12:16:54

Man, that's awesome!!  but you're  girl right? or are you....anywayz...awesome song!  i can relate with that song totally!  i love this line...
"Can you smell the smoke
Or do you even have any clue
That Ive been set afire
With the hell that you put me through"