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Topic: Almost revisited

Heck - if Dylan can say revisited - so can I  smile

I kept playing my song Almost and came to the conclusion that it basically sucked without a chorus.
So this morning  I wrote a chorus to it.

It's a little long - but what the heck - it is  a blues song.
It's just a song about someone who is so angry about giving all they had, and then being tortured by the failure of the relationship.

so here it is in it's eternity, I mean entirety  smile

AlmostJim Kenyon





intro




4th string 2nd fret, to hammer on, on the 4th string 4th fret


5th string 3rd fret


Followed by 4th string 2nd fret, 4th string open, 3rd string 2nd fret, 3rd string open to [Em]


Followed by :




[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [A11/E] [Em]




Verse 1


[Em] it almost happened, it was almost Heaven , it was almost all life long


it was [A]almost certain,reallyhad it working , it was [Em] almost a true love song


It was [B7]almost perfect,almost you and me


now I’m [C7] almost hopeless ,it was [B7]almost never [4 tb string -2nd fret, 4 tb string open, 3rd string 2nd fret, 3rd string open ] meant to [Em]be


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]




verse 2




[Em] now I'm almost gone, almost there,I almost held true love


I'm [A]almost sad , hurting bad,I found that[Em] almost ain't good enough


I'm [B7]almost sorry, I can almost see


that I'm[C7] almost where, I [B7] never,ever [4tb string 2nd fret, 4tb string open, 3rd string 2nd fret,3rd string open] want to [Em] be


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]



.




CHORUS




Oh I’m [A] ruined and ravaged, wrecked and savaged


[Em]So afraid to live


I been [A] crushed to pieces, got no releases


[B7]Baby, I got [C7]nothing, nothing [B7] left to [Em]give


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]




.




Verse 3




[Em]Almost forgotten, almost dead, I’m almost at the end


I’m [A]almost empty, almost nothing,[Em] almost out of friends


[B7]I’m almost broken, almost always lonely


now I'm[C7] almost where, I [B7] never,ever [4tb string 2nd fret, 4tb string open, 3rd string 2nd fret,3rd string open] want to [Em] be


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]








verse 4


[Em] I’m almost depleted , I'm almost completed, I’m almost out of time


I’m [A]almost breathless , almost spent, I’m [Em]almost never fine


[B7]I’m almost wrecked,I'm near the end of me


now I'm[C7] almost where, I [B7] never,ever [4tb string 2nd fret, 4tb string open, 3rd string 2nd fret,3rd string open] want to [Em] be


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]





.




CHORUS


Oh I’m [A] ruined and ravaged, wrecked and savaged


[Em]So afraid to live


I been [A] crushed to pieces, got no releases


[B7]Baby, I got [C7]nothing, nothing [B7] left to [Em]give


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]






.




verse 5


[Em] almost burned out, and always drunk, almost want to cry


If I [A]said I'm OK and almost fine, [Em] ya know that's one big lie


[B7] I was almost in love,'fore you shattered me


now I'm [C7] almost where, I [B7] never,ever [4tb string 2nd fret, 4tb string open, 3rd string 2nd fret,3rd string open] want to [Em] be


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]




CHORUS




Oh I’m [A] ruined and ravaged, wrecked and savaged


[Em]So afraid to live


I been [A] crushed to pieces, got no releases


[B7]Baby, I got [C7]nothing, nothing [B7] left to [Em]give


[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]




.


repeat and fade out




[B7]Baby, I got nothing, [C7]nothing[B7] left to [Em]give


[B7]Baby, I got nothing, [C7]nothing[B7] left to [Em]give




slow[Em] [A] [A11/E] [Em]


Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Almost revisited

hi Jim, running it through in my head felt like more of a soft rock rhythm similar to "is this love?" by either whitesnake or rainbow? just the rhythm not the melody line. i like it and when i get the chance i shall give it a go on the guitar.

just had a quick strum and i find it works perfectly, your frazing is reminiscent of the travelling wilburys so it's an automatic like from me.
i feel it might benefit from a bridge, maybe alter a verse to suit?

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: Almost revisited

Phill,
AS usual - you always have license to make it your own - it always comes out better that way !
I would love to hear what you do with it.

Thanks
Jim

P.S. I don't  really know what a bridge is or how to write one in a song smile

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

Re: Almost revisited

A bridge; it's where a song takes on a bridging section which goes from the verse to the chorus or to a solo maybe even a change of key. You'll hear them in most songs especially country tracks. The famous one is where George Harrison and Eric Clapton were writing a song and Harrison wrote "bridge" and Clapton thought that was the title, but Harrison's writing was so bad he thought it was "Badge". Ha ha

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

Re: Almost revisited

A bridge; it's where a song takes on a bridging section which goes from the verse to the chorus or to a solo maybe even a change of key. You'll hear them in most songs especially country tracks. The famous one is where George Harrison and Eric Clapton were writing a song and Harrison wrote "bridge" and Clapton thought that was the title, but Harrison's writing was so bad he thought it was "Badge". Ha ha

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.