1 Topic by Peatle Jville (edited by Peatle Jville 2017-09-24 10:33:40)

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Topic: Be Careful Who You Choose

This is a poem I wrote after I was asked to write a poem about love from the perspective of a person of my years,
It is more about the advice I would give a teenager.

Be Careful Who You Choose.

Love can make fools out of all us.
Love can be right can be wrong.
Sentiments written  in silly songs.
Trying to avoid it would be wrong.
Before you were born and after your gone.
Love from the heart in millions of songs
Love sort after  then unjustly refused.
To those who have been abandoned and abused.
It can be hard at times to know  who to choose.
So be careful who you choose.
Yeah be careful who you choose.
Lust of the flesh can tear you apart.
Lust on its own is not made of the heart .
It turns to dust and tears you apart.
So be careful who you choose.
Yeah be careful who you choose.
Counterfeit love is made of greed and posssession.
It leads to loss and depression
So be careful who you choose.
Yeah be careful who you choose

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That's really,really  good Peatle !!!!!

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

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Re: Be Careful Who You Choose

Peatle strikes again ! brilliant !

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4 Reply by Peatle Jville (edited by Peatle Jville 2017-09-24 23:58:26)

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Thank you for the feed back TIG and EB. This poem doesnt quiet work on most younger teenagers.  Most life lessons are learnt when you are able to look back a bit and study what didn't work out. Putting old heads on young shoulders doesn't always work.

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Sensational Peatle. It really hits the spot and you've written it in a sensible and intelligent way. At 66 I understand it perfectly and it's advice I've given to my kids and grandkids though not as lyrically or factually or even ellequently as you.

Well done and thanks for sharing.

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Re: Be Careful Who You Choose

Peatle ... thanks so much for this!

It's great poetry, and wise counsel. My late-father would say similar things as I entered my mid- and late-teens, and I'm glad I heeded his/your advice. Gotta great gal ... my best friend for 41 years, and my wife for 38 years.

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Thank you for your feed back Phill and TF. Maree and I  have true love we disagree about many things but the main thing is we never get sick of each others company and work things out.  Our time together is never boring. . She knows all my flaws, mistakes, and weaknesses and still she loves me.after 36 years of marriage. My Nann and Grandpah were married at 17  and their love and lifetime together with respect for each other was a good example for me.

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That is AWESOME Peatle .... a great piece of writing smile

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Thank you Jandle glad my words work.