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Topic: Discontented life

Just a simple song I wrote back in 2011

Discontented life

Intro 2 bars C

Verse 1
C
You take me to the edge,
Em
I feel like I will fall,
Am                                                         F
But you won’t be there to pick me up,
C
Tell me what I did wrong,
Em
To make your hate so strong,
Am                                            F
It never stopped me loving you,


Chorus
F            G                             C
And as I wander through this discontented life,
F G                          C
I feel so damned cold inside,
F                   G                 C   C/B   C/A   C/G
Cos every time, every time I forgive you,
F          G      C                       
I feel like a fool


Verse 2
C
You’re never there
Em
No you just don’t care
Am                                              F
Build me up then throw me away.
C
I feel just like your toy
Em
And not your lover boy
Am                                               F
What will it take to make you stay?

Repeat Chorus to end

©copyright Trevor Scrivens 18/10/2011

https://soundcloud.com/trevor-scrivens/ … ented-life

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Re: Discontented life

I played this through several times and made a few chord changes, but that's just to suit my style of playing.  I think the lyrics are great, I just hope you're not writing from experience.

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Re: Discontented life

keepitreal Thank you,yes from experience. I'm interested in what chords you changed and how you played it.

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Re: Discontented life

Hi ctech. Please let me say again, I think the lyrics are great. Sorry it has to be about a bad experience.  I don't want to be seen to be interfering with your song but as I was playing it through this is what I found. Please remember, I am no songwriter or guitarist.
In the verses you play Am  F. I found Am  G added more emotion.
I added another line to the end of the first verse (D) what the hell am I supposed to do (Am)
Second verse, (D) should I get down on my knees and pray (Am)
I finished in Am rather than finish the verse in F and start the chorus with the same chord.
Their were a few other changes but perhaps to slight to mention.
Thank you for posting,

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Re: Discontented life

keepitreal No problem I was just interested how someone else would interpret  the song that's all. The F is on the end of the verse to lead into the chorus I liked the way it sounded. I'll put up a rough version so you can hear what I mean. As for bad experiences They come and go,Life is pretty good at the moment. Thanks for posting.

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Re: Discontented life

I see you added a link to the recording on the original post.  WOW!  Very well done!  OH ... the FEELS!  Great lyrics and sound!

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Re: Discontented life

ctech, another great one.

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Re: Discontented life

Good one ctech not over done not under done.