1 (edited by beamer 2015-11-05 04:31:27)

Topic: BONES, DUST & LUST

First  draft Nov 3 2015  First verse pulled form old poem and taken a new direction.

Something heavy and light probably in in B or Bm. (think Metallic or Megadeath)  (~) = 1/4 rest





1.
BLACK,     (~) LEATHER FANTASY

SHADES    (~) OF DAYS GONE PAST

EYES         (~) OF EMERALDS

THE SHADOWS THEY CAST

2.
THE PAST  (~) LIKE BROKEN BONES

YOUR SKELETONS (~) TURN TO DUST

THE PAST  (~)  OF BROKEN LUST

YOUR SKELETONS (~) TURN TO DUST

C.
CLOSET OPENS - SHADOWS SPILL OUT

MEMORY FLASHES, EXCITES YOU,

INVITES YOU, AND CRASHES


1.
BLACK,     (~) LEATHER FANTASY

SHADES    (~) OF DAYS GONE PAST

EYES         (~) OF EMERALDS

THE SHADOWS THEY CAST


C.
CLOSET OPENS - SHADOWS SPILL OUT

MEMORY FLASHES, EXCITES YOU,

INVITES YOU, AND CRASHES


2.
THE PAST  (~) LIKE BROKEN BONES

YOUR SKELETONS (~) TURN TO DUST

THE PAST  (~)  OF BROKEN LUST

YOUR SKELETONS (~) TURN TO DUST

THEY TURN TO DUST, TURN TO DUST, TURN TO DUST, TURN TO DUST (Using a decaying delay let repeat out multiple times)

“Find your own sound.  Dont be a second rateYngwie Malmsteen be a first rate you”

– George Lynch 2013 (Dokken, Lynchmob, KXM, Tooth & Nail etc....)

Re: BONES, DUST & LUST

This is incredibly vivid, Beamer ... even without a tune. Tres cool ! cool

Re: BONES, DUST & LUST

Beamer

A title like that requires everyone to check it out.

Powerful stuff - leaves a lot for the imagination - I've read it three times now and each time thought of different scenarios. 

I have no clue how it would play in terms of music - I don't know anything about Metal type music.
However - I would love to hear your version played when transferred into production of a song.

Great job man !!

Be sure to visit the "Gum wall"  and "fish tossing" at Pike's Market in Seattle !   smile

Jim

Your vision is not limited by what your eye can see, but what your mind can imagine.
Make your life count, and the world will be a better place because you tried.

"Use the talents you possess, for the woods would be very silent if no birds sang except only the the best." - Henry Van Dyke

4 (edited by beamer 2015-11-06 01:12:08)

Re: BONES, DUST & LUST

this works even better, amazing what one little change can do!

1.
BLACK,     (~) LEATHER FANTASY

SHADES    (~) OF DAYS GONE PAST

EYES         (~) OF EMERALDS

THE SHADOWS THEY CAST

2.
THE PAST  (~) LIKE BROKEN BONES

YOUR SKELETONS (~)   OF BROKEN LUST

THE PAST  (~) TURN TO DUST

YOUR SKELETONS (~) OF BROKEN LUST

C.
CLOSET OPENS - SHADOWS SPILL OUT

MEMORY FLASHES, EXCITES YOU,

INVITES YOU, AND CRASHES


1.
BLACK,     (~) LEATHER FANTASY

SHADES    (~) OF DAYS GONE PAST

EYES         (~) OF EMERALDS

THE SHADOWS THEY CAST


C.
CLOSET OPENS - SHADOWS SPILL OUT

MEMORY FLASHES, EXCITES YOU,

INVITES YOU, AND CRASHES


2.
THE PAST  (~) LIKE BROKEN BONES

YOUR SKELETONS (~)   OF BROKEN LUST

THE PAST  (~) TURN TO DUST

YOUR SKELETONS (~) OF BROKEN LUST

THEY TURN TO DUST, TURN TO DUST, TURN TO DUST, TURN TO DUST (Using a decaying delay let repeat out multiple times)

“Find your own sound.  Dont be a second rateYngwie Malmsteen be a first rate you”

– George Lynch 2013 (Dokken, Lynchmob, KXM, Tooth & Nail etc....)