1 (edited by Tenement Funster 2015-08-20 20:30:01)

Topic: FOGGY ALL AROUND

A big part of being a parent to adult children, is learning to let go. This little poem hopefully captures some of that:

FOGGY ALL AROUND

One of those mornings …
Limited visibility …
Don't know the time, can't even see my watch,
Don't know where to go, can't even see a ahead,
Don't know where I've been, can't clearly see behind,
Don't know what to do, feels like I'm flying blind.

CHORUS:    It's foggy all around, it's cutting off the view,
        Can't see which way to go, this fear is nothing new,
        But then I look up, and there's the blue sky,
        It's might be foggy all around, but we can always learn to fly.

One of those years …
Limited options …
Don't know why he hurts, and his hurt is hard to see,
Don't know how to help, but his pain is hurting me,
Don't know if he'll make it, or if he'll find his way,
Don't wish my boy to suffer, but by his side I'll stay.

CHORUS:

One of those things …
Limited understanding …
Don't know how it happened, but things are quite alright,
Don't know how he did it, but it was quite a fight,
Don't know if it's always, or if he'll fall again,
Don't need to worry 'bout him, each victory is his gain.

CHORUS:

One of these days …
Limited lifespan …
Don't know if grandkids, are my future's plan,
Don't know if he'll be a Dad, now that he's a man,
Don't know his family plans, but now that he is grown,
Don't need to be in charge, he's flying on his own.

Re: FOGGY ALL AROUND

TF?

I'm hearing it as a song, with you slowing down at each "One of those's" and saying that phrase along with the next one and then beginning to play/sing again. Does that make sense?

Or, you may just want to leave it a poem, because the words are perfect. I wouldn't change a thing, and you know how picky I am about syntax and stuff. big_smile big_smile

Bill

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Re: FOGGY ALL AROUND

Thanks, Bill ...

It likely could be a song, and it's become habit to put in a chorus / refrain. Have a go at it, if you like ... I'm not much good at it. If you need to change any wording to get the meter right, please feel free to do so.

Re: FOGGY ALL AROUND

i thought it was a song and i got the same impression as bill with the slow down and speak the first 2 lines of each verse. i've got 4 grown up kids so i know your dilemma so all i can say is; they all raise a smile, some as they come in and some as they go out...nuff said i think. want to hear how you musicise it

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Re: FOGGY ALL AROUND

TF really good, understand it too with kids of my own.  I too can hear this as a song smile

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