1 Topic by Tenement Funster (edited by Tenement Funster 2015-08-03 10:49:47)

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Topic: MID SUMMER RAIN

I was sitting on this deck at first light this morning, enjoying my coffee as per usual habit. It just started raining lightly at first, but the softness and stillness of it all was engulfing in a way I can't fully describe. I've tried to with this poem:

MID SUMMER RAIN

That wonderful smell …
Cloaking the waking hours with unique bouquet
Relieved senses know that rainclouds are now set
It's been so dry, farmers are concerned and fret
Apples, plums, corn, and grain grow yet
Encouraged by that wonderful smell.

CHORUS:    A mist with a twist of a gist of the rain,
        A drip-drop, pitter-patter again and again
        Eyes closed, senses full, smiling,
        In this morning's mid summer rain.

That wonderful sound …
Tap, tap, tap from a drip, my leaf-clogged downspout
Gentle, so soft, soothing release within and without
Song birds listen in reverence, nothing moves about
A slurp at my coffee cup sounds like a shout
Interrupting that wonderful sound.

CHORUS:    A mist with a twist of a gist of the rain,
        A drip-drop, pitter-patter again and again
        Eyes closed, senses full, smiling,
        In this morning's mid summer's rain.

That wonderful sight …
Riverlets etch shadowy small streams on my canopy
Small runoffs move effortlessly, purpose-fully, randomly
Blades of grass dance upon impact, joyfully, happily
I can't strum a note that could compare to this symphony
Life all around is a wonderful sight.

CHORUS:    A mist with a twist of a gist of the rain,
        A drip-drop, pitter-patter again and again
        Eyes open, senses full, smiling,
        In this morning's mid summer's rain.

This wonderful warmth …
This is a welcome rain to our farming neighbors nearby
They've had it tough, some have said good bye
To the land, to the tractor, to generations gone by
Worked so hard, paid so little, for them I'm happy
It's a wonderful warmth.

CHORUS:    A mist with a twist of a gist of the rain,
        A drip-drop, pitter-patter again and again
        Eyes open, senses full, smiling,
        In this morning's mid summer's rain.

I've never heard music as beautiful as this was this morning!

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Re: MID SUMMER RAIN

TF waxing lyrical! you transported me to that place with those words, i could feel the gentle rain on my face as i was reading. i suppose i could imagine this to music, but would it spoil the vision? it would have to be a great tune to do it justice.

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Re: MID SUMMER RAIN

Thanks for your kind words, Phill ...

I can never seem to imagine a tune to go with any poetry I write ... don't know why. I suppose I think of something like "Morning Has Broken" or perhaps "Scarborough Fair" has being the right musical mood for this one.

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Re: MID SUMMER RAIN

Good words Tenement.
some times if i got a poem rather than a song.
i do a kinda talk the words with a bit of simple guitar.
i find with my dodgy voice it works.
give it a go

The King Of Audio Torture

5 Reply by TIGLJK (edited by TIGLJK 2015-07-29 22:50:16)

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Re: MID SUMMER RAIN

TF

That is really, really, really, really good !!!  Beautifully captured moments !!
and I love this line

"I can't strum a note that could compare to this symphony"  so true ......

nature is absolutely amazingly perfect in so many ways.


I was hoping for maybe one more stanza -of you describing what could you felt....  (i.e.  wind blowing on you,
heat of the sun on your face,  cool of the forest, softness of the moss underfoot  etc.....) to accompany the other senses - but I guess that's me being greedy for just a little more of your great work !

you have made mother nature proud in your depiction for sure.

Thanks so much for sharing

Jim

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Re: MID SUMMER RAIN

You're too kind, TIGLJK ... thanks for your comments.

So I started thinking about a 4th verse as you suggest, and am drawing blanks. That's a funny thing about poetry / songwriting. It either "happens" or it doesn't.

7 Reply by Tenement Funster (edited by Tenement Funster 2015-08-03 11:01:59)

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Re: MID SUMMER RAIN

You recommended one more stanza, TIG, and it took a while coming (see above).

You challenged me to describe how the rain made me feel, and I guess it's mainly relief for our many neighbors with farms. Our Valley is primarily an agricultural corridor, and whatever affects the farmers affects us all. The couple days of rain we had made me very happy for them.

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