Songwriting experiment for Chordians (Page 1 of 3)

I remember doing something like this before, not sure if it ever got finished. But it sounds like a good idea to me.

I assume the title will contain the hook so we'll know which direction the song is supposed to be going?  Who decides song structure for the verses and chorus ( example: ABAB, AABB, ABABAC, rhyme scheme, 3/4 or 4/4 time, etc, etc) ? If these elements are unknown up front,  it'll be more like the collaborative writing of a poem with music being added later.  Still, the effort might produce an interesting piece.

DE

Yes Grah,that's the one I remember.
Also may I refer you to page 8, easybeat, writing a song.

i was just listening to russ hardings fat old man making up stuff and a couple of lines popped into my head

so first line;

1. moved on down where the hot cars racing. (sung to what russ's playing)

big dirty engines throwing up smoke.

next please

Behind Porche and Ferarri I took up my place
as we waited for green lights that started the race.

Brilliant line T F, bout to get mini-mized. Must be a hook in there.

My motor was red lined in third gear so I slammed it in forth.

The flames from my pipes blew fire like a torch.

Think we need a chorus in there somewhere. Any ideas  T F. You come up with the best line yet

The Vox car seems to have stalled things.
I suggest we stop for an instrumental break. (can you play that thing)?

Dayum! After reading all the verses and the choruses, I have to admit I'm out-classed.

No wonder I have such a tough time writing songs! I can't keep my mind on what I'm trying to convey!

Guess I'll just have to be satisfied with the fact I'm allowed to hang with y'all here!

One thing: If you guys and ladies can polish the "Mini-Cooper" angle, I can see no reason why you shouldn't submit it to their ad agency.

In awe,

Your Friend

Bill

Do you think we got enough stuff in there yet? If so we now need a musical genius (and I know their are many in Chordie), to put it all together. Any volunteers?

How about adding the chorus in at the end of the second verse as well.

I had a hard time getting the fourth verse to roll out smoothly with the rhythm I was developing in my head so I also made a slight change there; in italic.

I moved on down to where the hot cars racing
Big dirty engines throwing up smoke
Everyone laughed at my mini cooper
Said it looked like a bit of a joke.

Behind Porche and Ferarri I took up my place
As we waited for green lights that started the race
They thought I was beat coz they were supersized
But I knew they were bout to get mini - mized.

To win any race you gotta be wise
Don't matter how big all those other guys
Coz big ones fall, even supersized
A thing I like to call, you bin mini-mized.

I was off down the straight like a bat out of hell, and I knew this could be fun
And one by one the big boys fell as I let those horses run
I'll wipe that smile from your face you big disgrace, coz everyone can see.
This is no chariot race and you can't keep pace with mini cooper and me.

I was red lined in third so I slammed it in forth
The flames from my pipes they blew like a torch
Layin' rubber in forth as I aimed for the line
I knew that I'd left all the big boys behind.
           
To win any race you gotta be wise
Don't matter how big all those other guys
Coz big ones fall, even supersized
A thing I like to call, you bin mini-mized.