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Topic: i have one that needs a title

after getting a few suggestions I also realized that besides a title  It needed something more so I added another verse I think closes it.
story of my life I guess working the oil field just cant think of a good title any suggestions?

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(G) spent half of my life on the(C) gulfs open(G) waters
(G) the other half drinking(D) trying not to(G) fall
(G) dodging the foot steps(C) left by my(G) father
(G)but I hear the voice of his(D) ghost down the hall

(D)these blood shot eyes are a(C) window
(D)to a soul that's been (C)battered and (G)bruised
(D)I've been scared and left un(C)attended
(D)I've been stained by the(C) devils own(G) brew

now I cant escape the blood in my veins
its part of a curse and it came my name
there aint no reasons for the demons in me
I never saw depression war or disease



these blood shot eyes are a window
to a soul that's been battered and bruised
I've been scared and left unattended
I've been stained by the devils own brew

now I like the whiskey just a little to much
some call it a weakness some call it a crutch
so what if I like to get drunk everyday
I pick up my whiskey my guitar and play

but these blood shot eyes are a window
to a soul that's been battered and bruised
I've been scared and left unattended
I've been stained by the devils own brew


now I walk in the foot steps left by my father
but I cant blame him for the path that choose
each one of us must look in the mirror
and see our own truth that we cannot refuse

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Re: i have one that needs a title

Drinking Song.

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Re: i have one that needs a title

I like the line window to a soul ,nice song

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Re: i have one that needs a title

Mojo, This one say's a lot. The good ones come from somewhere down deep.
My suggestion= Battered and Bruised.

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Re: i have one that needs a title

How about "Stained"

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Re: i have one that needs a title

+1 battered and bruised

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Re: i have one that needs a title

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I really like your   song - very strong emotional story, conjures up lots of scenarios - lets the listener fit their own pieces in.

I was wondering though - Was the line in stanza three last line supposed to say  I "never" saw  depression ,war or disease   ?

My thought on a title would be Devil's brew

good song - I like it a lot.

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Re: i have one that needs a title

TIGLJK you would be correct im not a very good proof reader. im glad you liked it. I was leaning towards battered and bruised or devils brew I will wait on a few more votes

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Re: i have one that needs a title

I'm leaning towards " on the gulf"


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Re: i have one that needs a title

The chorus is repeated three times through the song and to me, the most memorable line of the chorus is "I've been stained by the devil's own brew".  I think that would be the line most folks would remember in the song and what they would use if they asked you to play it.

"Hey, play that song you wrote about the devil's brew."

"Battered and bruised" is also another phrase most folks might remember after hearing the song for the first time.

Either one would work IMO.

Good song mojo.

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Re: i have one that needs a title

I'm sort of reading in the lyrics a kind of  depression passed down from your father.
Hence the title "My fathers gift" sad
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