Topic: STAR (another one by Beamer and Jetts)
OK, I have the last verse and I think it ties it all up.
STARScott Sailer / Jeff Gilpen 6-17-14
– George Lynch 2013 (Dokken, Lynchmob, KXM, Tooth & Nail etc....)
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Guitar chord forum - chordie → Songwriting → STAR (another one by Beamer and Jetts)
OK, I have the last verse and I think it ties it all up.
I like it so far,jets is a good choice for pairing up with. Song seems a little short.
Big solo in the middle?
I like what you have so far guys. Perhaps another verse or two before repeating the first would get more of the story and feelings to come out. It's very good and just has me wanting more. Waiting to hear the recorded version. Nice job!
Dave
Big solo in the middle?
Yep if you want to play it! LOLOL I dont do lead.
I like what you have so far guys. Perhaps another verse or two before repeating the first would get more of the story and feelings to come out. It's very good and just has me wanting more. Waiting to hear the recorded version. Nice job!
Dave
Working on it,, since I tend to write long stuff,, I thought a short one would be nice LOLOLOL
gidday guys,
good work,i think it`s ok as is.
if u said what u had to say, then it`s complete.
i often notice writers think they need to spin a song out longer
& it losers it`s way & feels forced.
if u happy with it, that`s the main thing.
before u started there was nothing,now u have created some thing.
go u good thing!
What I was thinking about this song was that it was written as more of a rock ballad than the heaver stuff that is usually Beamer's kind of song. I think the melody is kind of haunting and the words tell a bittersweet story of so many garage band guitar heroes who have dreams of stardom that seems to always to elude them, but they're a star already to the one who loves them. Mostly Beamers' words and music. I only tweaked it a smidgen. Kind of reminds me a little of Russ' Reflections. Your work's definitely getting better Beamer.
I will be adding another verse to it for better closure. I wrote it tue night,, just have not gotten on here to edit. well as they say bear your soul and the rest follows. this is about as blunt as I can be.
Third verse added
I would like to hear the rhythm you have set for this song I feel there are couple of ways it could be played ,at the moment I'm bending to a rocky style but I think it could go power ballad with a little development hence the comment about big solo before .
PM me your email. I have a rough track of the very first time I played it into my smart phone.
it is sorta CCR who will stop the rain ish,, but it does bend to 80s power ballad pretty good i would think,, I strummed on it for a hour or so at the lake last weekend. I also have a couple failed attempts to make a vid LOLOL
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