• Registered: 2011-03-12
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Topic: New Video

http://fandalism.com/jlustick/cohX


A link to a video of our version of "All I Want Is A Garden" which is a song by the group Brother Sun.

  • zguitar
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  • From: Mentone, Ca
  • Registered: 2009-01-10
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Re: New Video

Nice job Jeff!!!


Voorheesville. Too funny. I wonder if that's how they came up with the name for Jason in Friday the 13th.

Keep Rockin!!!!!!!!!!!
  • Registered: 2011-03-12
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Re: New Video

Thank you for taking the time to watch and comment on this video. It is much appreciated!!!

Voorheesville is a pretty quiet placw but I'll keep my eyes peeled for Jason!!!

  • From: Tooele Ut
  • Registered: 2006-03-04
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Re: New Video

Excellent Jeff

You can see all my video covers on [url]http://www.youtube.com/bensonp1000[/url]
I have finally found happiness in my life.  Guitars, singing, beer and camping.  And they all intertwine wonderfully.
  • Registered: 2011-03-12
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Re: New Video

Thanks Ben-much appreciated.

  • From: Chillicothe, Ohio
  • Registered: 2010-08-16
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Re: New Video

Excellent job Jeff, the vocals and harmonies were spot on.

As a fellow songwriter I also took the time to listen to your originals.  I was especially impressed with "A Child's Eyes".  Besides the well-written lyrics the verses were presented in a consistent ABAB rhyme structure with excellent phrasing and cadence.  The prosody was dead on due to your use of minor chords to complement the lyrics. The hook/chorus grabbed my attention as a well-written song should. All-in-all a really good song about a difficult subject.

I found it interesting that in most of your other songs you do not utilize a lyrical chorus or hook, but rather a melodic chorus (guitar riff).  Is this a writing style you developed on your own or is it influenced by a particular songwriter? 

DE

I want to read my own water, choose my own path, write my own songs
  • Registered: 2011-03-12
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Re: New Video

Ed,

Thank you for the feedback-I loved doing that song with Susan and Kate doing harmonies. I also appreciate your feedback about the songs that I wrote. "A Child's Eyes" is actually one of my favorites that I've written for lots of reasons. Your comment about  the structure of some of my other songs is an interesting one. I think it is more a personsl style than anything else. If I'm honest about it I would have to say that sometimes it just happens that way and other times I can't find a lyrical chorus or hook that I like well enough to include. That tells me I need more practice writing those parts!!!! There are times when I wish I had someone else to write with since evryone has a different outlook and strengths but so far all of my writing has been just me. I do play with other people (obvious in some of the videos) but no one has been interested in writing. Oh well....

Is there someplace where I could go to hear your music???