I  thought I'd try writing something that might go into punk, gothic, heavy metal or something like that. (probably b/c Phill told me I was too "mushy " in my last song  )
But since I have no clue to how the music of that genre is written - I'll leave to some one else.
(maybe a hint to Beamer or someone ?   )

I don't know - but it was kid of fun writing it.
any comments or ideas to improve it would be appreciated
Jim

Wretched Lives

Verse 1
Not a demon to expose your flaws
Nor a savage beast with bloody claws
only your worst fears, fallen into place
when you've lost it all and life’s a waste

Verse 2
gripped by the  loneliness of a silent curse
constant reminders , make things worse
when you don't believe it, but yet you know
there’s no one to hold and nowhere to go

Chorus
such is the fate of those with wretched lives
hopelessly waiting for their ships to arrive
too scared to be bold, and face the cruel facts
and haunted by visions of what their lives lack

Verse 3
Hurry to nowhere, like the aimless winds blows
In search of  comfort that someone else knows
every hour that passes, and faith slips away
Dreading the darkness , which brings a new day