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These were my thoughts as I woke up this morning only slightly modified for verse, rhyme and decency reasons otherwise it is as it occurred to me at 6.15 this morning.

               65.              by Phill Williams. 29/11/16

When I wake up every morning in my head I'm still 18.
But once my eyes are open, my youth was just a dream.
A dream of summers hot and long.
Of Christmas trees and Christmas songs.
Of swimming, running – snowball fights.
Of young romance on balmy nights.
Suddenly I'm back to now.
65 and freezing cold.

My arm is cold above my head.
It cant be moved – oh God! It's dead!
Under sheets to get it warm.
Pins and needles as blood returns.
“It's gone to sleep” as my mam once said.
Until it does it feels like lead.

I roll-up now into a ball.
So cosy under blankets warm.
Till my knees hurt and my back hurts too.
My stomach shouts out -  “I NEED SOME FOOD!”
And what my wife has called for 30 years.
“That useless piece of skin” – not hers.
Has found a new lease of life it seems.
Bathroom time....I need a pee.

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Re: Sixtyfive

I had to smile as I read my way through your poem, Phill! :-) I think it fits so many of us and is right on the mark as it makes me say to myself "Oh God! That happens with him too???

That very last line for instance, describes me perfectly --- about 4 times a night! smile..... Are you thinking of working it into one of your "Iphill fine" musical works.

Thanks for the smiles as I related to your words, my friend!

Bill

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Re: Sixtyfive

Ditto  Do you think the Beatles had a moment when they  did When I'm  64?

my papy said son your going too drive me too drinking if you dont stop driving that   Hot  Rod  Lincoln!! Cmdr cody and his lost planet airman
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dino48 wrote:

Ditto  Do you think the Beatles had a moment when they  did When I'm  64?

Hi Dino

I think Macca was in his mid 20 s when he wrote when I'm 64, if he did then there's hope for us all?

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Re: Sixtyfive

Hi Bill

I'd like to thank you and Dino for having a read and commenting. I hadn't thought of putting it to music unless I do something like has been done recently and speak it over some guitar strumming? Notice that I avoided the rap word? When they thought up that title they left out the C lol

Thanks again, love to Dondra

Ask not what Chordie can do for you, but what you can do for Chordie.

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Phill Williams wrote:

Hi Bill

I'd like to thank you and Dino for having a read and commenting. I hadn't thought of putting it to music unless I do something like has been done recently and speak it over some guitar strumming? Notice that I avoided the rap word? When they thought up that title they left out the C lol

Thanks again, love to Dondra

Phill I think using a lot or all the chords too When I'm 64 would work.

my papy said son your going too drive me too drinking if you dont stop driving that   Hot  Rod  Lincoln!! Cmdr cody and his lost planet airman
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Re: Sixtyfive

Gidday Phill
Yeah go for it,i think the talking over a few chords would work really well.
looking forward to hearing what u do to it.
I do the talking thing often because i can`t sing,sometimes it kinda works.
hey why be a slave to rules eh?

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Re: Sixtyfive

Terrific stuff, Phill ... I grinned all the way through reading it, and it was all way too familiar. Nicely done!

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Re: Sixtyfive

Even though it is summer at Christmas time here, those words make sense to me one of the oldest 18 year olds who lives in my part of the wood's, me.

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Re: Sixtyfive

Peatle, you live in the Forrest?

Chords to when I'm 64? Might work I'll have to give it a go.

Thanks to everyone for reading my early morning thoughts

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Phill it works well with the chords timing and rythem of when I'm 64.

my papy said son your going too drive me too drinking if you dont stop driving that   Hot  Rod  Lincoln!! Cmdr cody and his lost planet airman
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shall have to try it, i used to play when i'm 64 in my set years ago but it's one of those that fell by the wayside. i was tempted to revive it last year when i was 64....i resisted...   lol

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Re: Sixtyfive

Phill,

I think you should record this with the band "Limp Biscuit" as your back up ! smile   smile   smile

Great song by the way - too bad it's so "dead balls"  accurate ! (Pun intended!) smile
Thanks for sharing - waiting for a great rendition.

Jim

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Re: Sixtyfive

Phill Williams wrote:

Peatle, you live in the Forrest?

Chords to when I'm 64? Might work I'll have to give it a go.

Thanks to everyone for reading my early morning thoughts

Phill. I don"t live in a forrest just on the edge of a beautiful valley. There are plenty of trees around here and not far away is a forrest that goes to the top the highest hill that overlooks the valley I live in. My part of the woods is just a phrase we use here when talking about our part of town.

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Peatle......gotcha wink

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