Hi Goonie,
Like most others I loved the lyrics to your song and agree that there is a lot of potential but it is not helped with having each line starting raggedly about halfway across the page and unless I am reading it wrong every verse has a different chord sequence which will mean a different melody. I do however feel that with a bit of work this could be a very good song.
I would like to hear a recording of this song, in fact, I would love you to prove my comments wrong and have a great song just as it stands.
Thank you,
Roger
you are right that the melody is a bit scattered but it still sounds pretty good..this is only the original chords though. the newer version i did i would have to put on tabs...i am almost finished with the recording so i'll let you know when im done