Well, I just completed two songs last night, they are my first posts on Chordie, and I want to know what everyone who looks at them thinks, honestly. I really like writing songs, but I don't really know if they are any good, so critisim is more than welcome.
[First Song]"She's Too Young"
V1:
Please don't break down her defenses/And please don't mention/ all the times you'll never break her heart/As soon as someone comes along/ who'll give you what you really want/
I know she'll be left behind to cry/ and pick the pieces up
Chorus: x1
She's too young not to trust you
She's too young not to love you
She's too young to give her heart away to someone just like you
She's too young...
V2:
On the floor her heart is gone/
is shattered and she knows she'll/ never find someone like you again
For years she'll never trust a man/ assuming she can never win/ the game of love she'll lose/ her faith in the Man Above...
Chorus: x2 [2nd time "I'm too young..]
[Second Song] (don't have a title yet...suggestions?)
You braided your lies around my heart/ in the end it tore me apart/ I can't love you/ can't forgive you/ but I can't live a day/ without you/ imagining what should've and could've been..
Chorus: x1
I'm a wreck without you
I'm a lie without you
I am just a simple girl who covers it with pearls
And diamond rings don't change a thing
Just a simple girl with a dream of you...
I just can't find the words to say/but somehow I'll find a way/ to change the things that went astray/ things that made me say..
Chorus x2.
Okay, those were my songs. Hope you enjoyed and I hope they weren't too hard to read or anything, I'm just new at this.
Thanks,
Kate