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(81 replies, posted in Songwriting)

thanx, i'll work on it, i don't write music, long story but it wld sound like a Kelly Clarkson/Ana Johnson or mayb

Yellow Card song. Like i said i'm into writing- so probably not the rite site 4 me- but hey i like it here

p.s sanding? the tone to harsh?

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Very N I C E. except mayb 4 second last verse 'grasp' kinda makes it sound a little...stalkerish.  <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_redface.gif" border=0 alt="Embarassed">  but hey wat do i know?

like it. later <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_smile.gif" border=0 alt="Smile">

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(81 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hey soz 4 the typo's so basically i just sit down and write hence the lack of structure and chorus and verse outlines. wat i'd like to know is if it cld potentially b a good song? open 2 suggestions- Later  <img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_rolleyes.gif" border=0 alt="Rolling Eyes">

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<img src="images/smiley_icons/icon_redface.gif" border=0 alt="Embarassed"> well let me know wat u think...every1 who wants 2


He asks if I'v ever been heartbroken

I assume he means romantically

I asnswer no

He wonders what went wrong

I see it in his eyes

His opinion of me changing

Maybe, who knows

Twenty questions follow

I answer each one truthfully

He wonders how all this has happened at age eighteen

I guess it may seem cynical maybe a little harsh

But I long ago left the land of fairytales in the dust

Not far from my start

No, white horses and shining armour do not ring true to me

Yea it's complex let me break it down for ya'll

See here's what I believe

Ok so romance and butterflies

Your basic chemical reaction

So we tend to get high on this

As we now use a little of our brains

A mere fraction

We choose to ignore the facts

And on all reasoning turn our backs

Forget the hidden humaness

We begin to adore

And are blinded to the flaw

Ah such bliss

Dissillusionment settles like a think mist

We put them on pedelstal and mount them on walls

Yet we are suprised hen they hurt us and we fall

Expect to much when we walk on ceilings

The most dangerous love is to love completely

While we build castels in the sky we set them up to fail

Against this perfect model none can prevail

With great expectations come great dissapointment.

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