201 Reply by jets60

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Thank you, Jim. I checked that link out. I do like the way that song flows, and wish I had that much backing for my voice. smile     

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202 Reply by jets60

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Thanks Pete. I wasn't sure what music would work but settled on what you heard. Glad you liked it.     

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203 Reply by jets60

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Here is how I play it: https://soundcloud.com/jets60/no-though … 7938749608     

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204 Topic by jets60

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I wrote this as a poem a while back but decided to turn it into a song. Here is what I came up with.

No Thoughts Unkind By Jeff Gilpin


~


Intro


F - F - C - G




Verse 1


I [Am]don’t know where


I want to go


So [Em]when you ask


You ought to know


That [F]just right now


I just can’t decide


[C]Whether to stay


Or [G]run and hide


~


Chorus

And [C]all is well


We tell our mind


A [G]fib we tell


No thoughts unkind [F] [F] [C] [G]


~


Verse 3


But if I stay


I know that I


Will restlessly



Stay by your side


I may get on


Your nerves again


So you’ll ignore


And can pretend


~


Chorus

~


Verse 5


That I’m not here


Or that I am


And all is right


In the world again


The rain is light


The sun is warm


The world is right


And free of harm


~


Ending Chorus

And [C]all is well


We tell our mind


A [G]fib we tell


No thoughts unkind [F] [F] [C] [G] [Am7]



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205 Reply by jets60

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Thanks, Melania. I bet you write better than you're letting on but in your own voice. Everyone is unique and has their own stories to tell and styles of writing. I'm sure we all would love to read your poems. Please feel free to share.     

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206 Reply by jets60

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Enjoyed that Jim, great song. Important subject and well written and performed.     

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207 Reply by jets60

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Hey Scott - I enjoyed that. Showing your softer side. I would love to hear how you sing it as well.     

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208 Reply by jets60

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Thanks, Phill. I got the idea from the tag that came on my guitar I got this past winter. It didn't say "guitar", but said "instrument". I purposely kept it a little vague in the first verse to add a little mystery. This is another of my "you need to hear it to know how to play it" songs. I hope it plays well for you.     

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209 Reply by jets60

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Thanks Pete. I think so too.     

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210 Reply by jets60

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Uploaded if you want to hear it - https://soundcloud.com/jets60/the-instrument     

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211 Reply by jets60

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Hey Phill - I just sent you a scratch recording of how I think it goes. Let me know if you get it and if it comes close to how you meant it to be played.     

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212 Reply by jets60

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Phill Williams wrote:

Jeff, I've actually been there and it's lovely, I picked there because of the border and programmes like "queen of the south" that make it sound so dangerous!
Thanks for trying it out, I've tried it at the speed I wrote it and it's just not right, so I'll start again a little slower. I'd like to hear how you've done it if possible?

No problem - I'll record my version for you tonight.     

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213 Reply by jets60

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Liked the song Phill and plays well. - Mexico...hmm... Not a place I am looking to visit. Sounds unlucky.     

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214 Reply by jets60

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Thanks very much. I will keep writing but they can keep the gold.     

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215 Reply by jets60

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Thanks Jim     

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216 Topic by jets60

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Hey All,

I wrote this a while back when I was back-to-back writing and didn't want to clog up the songwriting forum, but I like it, and just after playing again I thought I would share. Doing this also forces me to get a recording up so I promise to do that soon, but until then try and give it play if you want. As for most of my songs, how to play it will become clear once I get a recording up. Hope you all enjoy it.

The Instrument By Jeff Gilpin


Written 1/28/2021


~


Intro


C F C C F C G


~


[C]I’m not very


[F]Big or [C]heavy


[C]I sit most days


[F]In a [C]stand


[G]I sometimes get a


[F]Little [G]dusty


[C]Some days I’m not much


[F]In de[C]mand


But [Am]I can be as patient [G]


As I re[C]main [F] [C] [C] [F] [C] [G]


~


[C]My skin can sure


[F]Take a [C]beating


[C]Though my body still


[F]Keeps it’s [C]curves


[G]My neck is long


[F]And out [G]sticking


[C]To my head that


Set[F]tles my [C]nerves


To[Am]gether I’m almost whole



But I’m [G]better if someone [C]plays me [F] [C] [C] [F] [C]


~


And my [Am]strings


Are better [F]strummed


And the [C]sound


I make when [G]someone


Begins to [Am]play


A melody some[F]times


Hopeful[C]ly


In [G]time with a [F]song [C] [F] [C] [F] [C] [G]


~


And the [C]sound can last


[F]A [C]while


[C]Played in any old


[F]kind of [C]style


[G]I’m not


Par[F]ticu[G]lar


[C]No tune


[F]Can de[C]file


So [Am]pick me up


[G]Tune me right in and [C]play me [F] [C]


Yes [Am]pick me up


[G]Tune me right in and [C]play me [F] [C] [C] [F] [C]



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217 Reply by jets60

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Fun song that I can relate to     

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218 Reply by jets60

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My pleasure Bill. That yodel thing sounded right to me then. Might be different next time, although I think it fits.     

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219 Reply by jets60

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Scratch recording up now if you want to hear how it goes: https://soundcloud.com/jets60/everything-everything     

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220 Reply by jets60

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Strummerboy Bill wrote:

Jeff

Sorry! I guess my post did come across as criticism even though that isn't what I intended. It was why I asked the question about sad songs always being played in minor keys. I too await your SoundCloud debut of your tune. I think I'll get it this time. smile

Thanks

Bill

PS: If I sounded ungrateful, that was also not my intention, my friend. Sorry!

Hey Bill,

I didn't take your comment as criticism and you had a good discussion point. The choice of chords that are used can most definitely impact how the song comes across. We're all good my friend. I didn't get to it this evening but I will try and knock it out before the weekend is over.

V/R,

Jeff     

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221 Reply by jets60

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Hey All,

Thanks - I'll try and get it up on my SoundCloud site later today. Once you hear it I think you'll get it.

V/R,

Jeff G     

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222 Reply by jets60

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Strummerboy Bill wrote:

Nice wording, Jeff and I like the turn-around, surprise ending.

I have a question for you and the others: Are we all of the school that teaches if a song is in a minor chord, it has to be sad? So I am wondering (if the answer is yes) can the song be changed into major chordage to make it sound more upbeat and funny? That is, if it were transposed, would it take away from the "meaning" of the tune?

If you're thinking "He wants this to be more upbeat-sounding", I guess you're right, Jeff. Not meant to be a criticism just a suggestion.

Of course, I also like Python's "Baggage Retrieval System At Heathrow", so what do I know? smile

Your friend,

Bill

Hey Bill - For this song, it was part of a writing challenge. Although I've changed the chords a bit, they're still mostly minor chords, which were part of the challenge, but there was no direction to the writing other than words that needed to be included. I've written with minor chords in positive songs and major chords in sad songs so I think it really depends on that song at that time. With all that, I have no problem with you changing the minor chords to majors if you prefer for your arrangement. Go for it! smile     

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223 Topic by jets60

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I wrote this recently in a song challenge, but I updated to chords I am more comfortable with. I think this falls in line with Bill's Goals theme, but more about just handling life/goal obstacles that we all have to face. I hope you all enjoy it.

Everything, Everything By Jeff Gilpin


7/26/2021


~


Intro


Am Dm F Dm x 2


~


[Am]Life can let you down,


Leave you [Dm]shaken to the core.


Feel just [F]whipped, on the ground,


[Dm]Everything, everything.


~


Then [Am]something’ll get you laughing.


Could be [Dm]anything at all.


[F]Can’t explain the reason


Of [Dm]everything, just everything.


~


Chorus 1


[Am]Life is just what life is.


It’ll [Dm]hurt you if you let it,


But [F]life can’t keep you down,



[Dm]Make you regret it unless you [Am]do. [Dm] [F] [Dm]


~


[Am]Life comes at you whirring,


Takes down the [Dm]tallest of the tall.


Throwing [F]obstacles, hurling


[Dm]Everything, just everything.


~


[Am]Dodging, try to counter


Slip [Dm]sliding right along


With [F]olive oil, syrup laughter


At [Dm]everything, just everything.


~


Chorus 2


[Am]Life is like you cooking


Your [Dm]favorite recipe,


While you [F]challenge your apron


To try and [Dm]keep food off you, but it never [Am]does. [Dm] [F] [Dm] [Dm7] [Am7]…



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224 Reply by jets60

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Hey Bill - Just sent you a scratch recording of The Goal, the song I wrote for you. Let me know if that helps on how to play it.     

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225 Reply by jets60

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Hey Bill,
Here's my offering for you. In my mind, it sounds kind of Tom Petty-like, but feel free to use whatever style you wish.
All the best,
Jeff G/jets60

The Goal (For Strummerboy Bill) by jets60


~


Intro Strumming A D E x 2


~


[A]Where to [D]start [E]


The be[A]gin seems [D]right [E]


[A]Keep on [D]going [E]


Straight [A]through the [D]night [E]


~


[A]Never give [D]up [E]


When the [A]going’s [D]tough [E]


[A]Never stop [D]going [E]


When the [A]road gets [D]rough [E]


~


[G]See that goal [D]


On [A]through to the end [A]


A[G]long the road [D]


[A]Picking up friends [E]



~


Who [A]help you [D]keep [E]


Your [A]goal in [D]sight [E]


In the [A]light of [D]day [E]


Or [A]dark of the [D]night [E]


~


[A]Some day [D]when [E]


The [A]end gets [D]near [E]


That [A]windy [D]road [E]


On [A]which you [D]steer [E]


~


[G]Eventually [D]


Will [A]cleanse your soul [A]


The [G]day will come [D]


When you [A]reach your goal [E] [A]



     

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