Hey Brad - I like it but I think you're right. A chorus might break it up a bit. Great sentiment though
2,002 2007-08-24 04:10:27
Re: Catch Your Breath (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Ark - I try and keep my music from always sounding the same but sometimes it will. Glad you like this one.
I grew up in Bluegrass country and Rhonda Vincent sounds like what I remember the girls sounding like and Dan Tyminski sounds like the guys I remember. Dan did the singing vocals for George Clooney in Oh Brother Where Art Thou. You might like him to so here's his myspace page: http://www.myspace.com/dantyminski
2,003 2007-08-23 05:10:32
Re: Catch Your Breath (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Jason and Daddy
2,004 2007-08-22 00:49:01
Re: Catch Your Breath (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks James - I guess I could have done that too. Glad you like the song too.
2,005 2007-08-21 20:21:58
Re: Bluegrass gospel song from last rebel.... (34 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey Ark - If you want to hear bluegrass go here:
http://www.myspace.com/rhondavincent13
She sings purty and is one of my favorites
2,006 2007-08-21 19:43:05
Re: Bluegrass gospel song from last rebel.... (34 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey Reb - Good stuff - Reminds me of where I grew up.
2,007 2007-08-21 18:33:36
Re: "Away Away" (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Since I am a reminiscing type of guy I really like this song and can relate to it. I like the melancholy music as well. You did a great job.
2,008 2007-08-21 18:24:05
Topic: Catch Your Breath (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Work has been a little busy lately but I finally had a break and I’m now enjoying my Monday and Tuesday weekend. So I got to thinking that this break was really a catch my breath weekend and I need to be ready for my first day back at work tomorrow. That’s where I got this song idea from. Hope you like it. Not sure why the B chord is showing up in lower case but I send a question off to James to see if he can work it on out
Catch Your Breath By Jeff Gilpin
August 21st, 2007
Intro
[B] [E] [D] [E]
Verse 1
[F#]Pushing hard for [B]way too long
[E]Still can’t see that finish [D]line[E]
It’s an [F#]internal race [B]against yourself
And [E]you got nothing but [D]time[E]
Verse 2
So [F#]step back when the [B]timing right
Look [E]up and survey what you [D]see[E]
Look [F#]what needs fixing look [B]where you’ve been
And [E]look where you want to [D]be[E] ... while you
Chorus
[F#]Catch your breath
[B]Take a break
So you’re [E]not too weary
And [D]make a mis[E]take
[F#]Ease on up
[B]Sigh a big sigh
[E]Compose yourself
And [D]press[E]on a[F#]gain
Verse 3
[F#]Little tweaks here ad[B]just some there
[E]Change to help keep you on [D]track[E]
Get [F#]mad if needed but [B]do patch it up
So it [E]won’t bite you in the [D]back [E]
Verse 4
[F#]Persevere and [B]never fear
There is [E]nothing you can’t over[D]come[E]
The [F#]closer you get to your [B]final goal
Is [E]where it should be the most [D]fun[E]... so
Chorus
[F#]Catch your breath
[B]Take a break
So you’re [E]not too weary
And [D]make a mis[E]take
[F#]Ease on up
[B]Sigh a big sigh
[E]Compose yourself
And [D]press[E]on a[F#]gain
Music only
[B] [E] [D] [F#] [B] [E] [D] [E]
Verse 5
[F#]Satisfaction victo[B]ry
[E]Great job done by one and [D]all[E]
[F#]Celebration leads to [B]inspiration
[E]Pretty soon you’re hearing that [D]call[E]
Verse 6
So you’re [F#]ready to go and start it [B]up yet again
[E]Time to get the ball a [D]rolling[E]
No [F#]rest for the weary or the [b]wicked will win
But re[E]member before you [D]begin[E]... you need to
Chorus
[F#]Catch your breath
[B]Take a break
So you’re [E]not too weary
And [D]make a mis[E]take
[F#]Ease on up
[B]Sigh a big sigh
[E]Compose yourself
And [D]press[E]on a[F#]gain
2,009 2007-08-21 18:12:49
Re: "t"title A LONESOME COWBOY (5 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey Daddy - absolutely - Like the icying on the cake.
2,010 2007-08-20 19:36:39
Re: "t"title A LONESOME COWBOY (5 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey daddy - I like it but it needs a chorus of some kind, maybe with yodeling, to go with it don't you think? Maybe between every two verses or so. What do you think - it would kind of break it up a bit.
2,011 2007-08-19 15:46:43
Re: Thinking About Old Friends (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Thanks Old Doll - I have friends like that too. Like putting on a pair of broken in jeans...that still fit that is. 
Hey Ken - Best if I record it and let you hear. Got to be tomorrow though. Off to work for now.
2,012 2007-08-18 05:07:36
Re: Thinking About Old Friends (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
The good thing about my commute is I get to think a lot...good ideas tend to gravitate to songs with me as well as the idea too so I get a double bonus!
2,013 2007-08-17 14:13:05
Topic: Thinking About Old Friends (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
I have a habit of reminiscing about all my friends that I’ve known. There are quite a few spread out all over the world. I know it is difficult but catching up with them when I get the chance is something chance doesn’t let happen very often so I was thinking I should make the time. That’s where I got this song idea from. Hope you like it.
Thinking About Old Friends By Jeff Gilpin
August 17th, 2007
Intro
[E] [A] [E] [D] [D] [A] [B7] [E] [E7]
Verse 1
[A]Thinking about [E]old friends
[D]Driving home from [A]work[E]
[A]Wondering what they’re [E]up to
[D]Thinking I’ll [E]try and catch [A]up
Verse 2
[A]Lots of friends lots of [E]places
[D]Some are who knows [A]where[E]
[A]They’re still all [E]my friends
[D]Living [E]on out [A]there
Chorus 1
[E]Wondering how they’re [A]doing
[E]Wondering where they’ve [D]been
[D]Wondering what’s new in [A]their life
And [B7]knowing they’re still my [E]friend[E7]
Verse 3
So [A]I’ll try and [E]find them
[D]When I find a little [A]time[E]
When [A]I do we’ll [E]catch up
Yeah [D]that [E]would be just [A]fine
Chorus 2
[E]Hearing how they’re [A]doing
[E]Hearing where they [D]been
[D]Hearing what’s new in [A]their life
Letting them [B7]know I missed my [E]friend[E7]
Verse 4
[A]Sounds like [E]a plan
I’m [D]on it as soon as I get [A]home[E]
[A]Can’t wait [E]to hear
All I’ve [D]missed [E]while I’ve [D]roamed[A]
2,014 2007-08-16 15:08:37
Re: How do you start writing music? (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey KramL - great question. For me I do it both ways but usually I get a musical idea in my head and put words to that. Usually the music fits better with the lyrics when I write that way. If I write the lyrics first and come up with the music I seem to have a bit more difficult time finding the right chord mix to fit the words. Hope that helps.
2,015 2007-08-16 14:01:10
Re: "Hunker On Down" (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
My father use to have an old war cartoon with to solders laying on the ground and bullets flying over their head .One said to the other, "I can't get any lower. My buttons are in the way" That's the best way to understand Hunkering in my mind. Great song - and very funny. Now I want to see the "Hunkering Dance"!
2,016 2007-08-16 13:51:13
Re: Airbrushed. (8 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Old Doll - just a great song - I do wish I could turn a phrase as well as you. I've never understood the whole nip-tuck culture. I'm with you too; who needs that kind of life.
2,017 2007-08-16 13:44:49
Re: Another one from last_rebel.... (9 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Great song reb - was a tough time and people forget all the reasons for that war. Great tribute.
2,018 2007-08-16 13:31:24
Topic: Keeping Up (1 replies, posted in Songwriting)
This is just a song about technology, the technology curve that seems pretty steep right now and working in technology driven industries. I hope you like it.
Keeping Up By Jeff Gilpin
August 16th, 2007
Intro
[F] [C] [G] [C] [F] [C] [E] [E7]
Chorus 1
[A]Keep up
Stay [E]current
With the [D]changes in the world
Just [A]to com[E]pete
[A]If you
Don’t stay [E]on it
You get [D]passed by
And become obso[A]lete
Verse 1
[F]Changes seem to [C]happen
When the [G]turn of your [C]head
So [F]catch back up
[C]When you find the [G]time
[F]What you know [C]today
Is [G]tomorrows histo[C]ry
So a[F]dapt and over [C]come
Or fall be[E]hind[E7]
Chorus 2
So [A]keep up
And stay [E]current
There’s [D]something new
Invented every [A]day[E]
[A]If you
Don’t stay [E]on it
[D]Other folks will
Send you on your [A]way
Verse 2
It’s o[F]kay to be a[C]mazed
But [G]don’t be una[C]ware
[F]Don’t just stand there
[C]Gawking for too [G]long
[F]See it, take it [C]in
And make [G]sure you learn to [C]use it
And be[F]fore you know it
The [C]world had moved [E]on[E7]
Chorus 3
That’s how you [A]keep up
And stay [E]current
As the [D]whirlwind of
Ideas come to [A]be[E]
[A]If you
Don’t stay [E]on it
You’ll be [D]watching
On an obsolete T[A]V
Verse 3
Re[F]member new i[C]deas
Come from [G]people just like [C]you
Who [F]needed to [C]overcome
A [G]problem or two
Under[F]stand what they [C]did
But [G]don’t spend too much [C]time
As something [F]better comes a[C]long
Or [E]maybe they got it [E7]wrong
But do all this while you[ ]...
Ending Chorus
[A]Keep up
And stay [E]current
With this [D]crazy world
Before [A]you go nuts [E]too
[A]If you
Don’t stay [E]on it
You [D]might just find
A better job to [E]do[D] [A]
2,019 2007-08-16 04:48:33
Re: Nibbling Ducks (2 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey Jason - Yep, I think so too. I've been hanging on to the nibbling ducks idea for a while and the day and music just came together. Glad you like it. I think it's worth recording and I will mostlikely record it in the next week or so, when I get the chance. Thanks!
2,020 2007-08-15 03:06:37
Re: "Infrastructure Blues" (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Singing your song suddenly made me worry about my wallet - Maybe if we raise taxes we can fix it! Get ready for this topic to be hammered at us until the election...along with Iraq. Good song - blues is right
2,021 2007-08-15 02:57:00
Topic: Nibbling Ducks (2 replies, posted in Songwriting)
I just combined a song idea with some chords I was playing putting my wife to bed that sounded nice to me and letting a tough day at work fade away as well. Here’s what I came up with. I can’t claim the nibbling ducks line as mine though. My father use to say that it’s not the biting crocodiles that get you but the nibbling ducks. He meant that it is not the big problems in life you need to worry about so much but the little ones that add up over time and could eventually wear you away. Anyway, I hope you like the song.
Nibbling Ducks By Jeff Gilpin
August 14th, 2007
Intro
[D] [D7] [D7] [G] [G7] [D] [A] [D]
Verse 1
[D]Day in [D7]day out
[D7]I’m not sure what it’s [G]all about
[G7]You’re a hero one day and a [D]goat the next
[A]Then you’re a hero [D]again
Verse 2
There’s [D]no rhyme [D7]or reason
[D7]Good days go and the [G]bad days come
[G7]Take it with a grain of salt and [D]just keep on
[A]The only certainty is it’ll [D]change[D7]
Chorus
[G]What doesn't kill you makes you [D]stronger
[A]Unless you let it kill your [D]drive[D7]
[G]When you can’t go on any [D]longer
Is [A]usually where you quit or learn to sur[A7]vive
Verse 3
So [D]shake it off [D7]and get back up
[D7]Try not to let your e[G]motions erupt
[G7]Nobody died from [D]nibbling ducks
So [A]don’t you be the [D]first
Verse 4
When [D]night comes[D7]let it go
[D7]Ease your weariness [G]far below
[G7]Drift away for a [D]little while
[A]Recharge and hit it [D]again[D7]
Chorus
[G]What doesn’t kill you makes you [D]stronger
[A]Unless you let it kill your [D]drive[D7]
[G]When you can’t go on any [D]longer
Is [A]usually where you quit or learn to sur[A7]vive
End with Verse 3
So [D]shake it off [D7]and get back up
[D7]Try not to let your e[G]motions erupt
[G7]Nobody died from [D]nibbling ducks
So [A]don’t you be the [G]first[A] [D]
2,022 2007-08-15 01:06:07
Re: Treasure (5 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hey Ark and Dylan - Thanks - I've been trying to resist the urge to over word/chord the songs and I think it worked out here. KISS principle at it's finest!
Last Reb - Thanks - I haven't sung it to her yet but I will in a minute
Old Doll - Thank you very much. I try and make up for how she spoils me by spoiling her with songs. I am lucky though.
2,023 2007-08-14 03:20:32
Topic: Treasure (5 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Sorry I haven’t been reviewing anyone else’s songs much. Work is a little busy right now. Here’s one I started the other day and finished tonight. Another sappy love ballad inspired by my wife. What can I say other than I am way spoiled. I hope you all like it. I will try and make time soon.
Treasure By Jeff Gilpin
August 13th, 2007
Intro
[Em] [G] [D] [A] [C] [C7]
Verse 1
[Em]If you come to me
I’ll [G]show you things you’ve [D]never seen
[Em]If you come to me
[G]I’ll fulfill your [D]wildest dream
[Em]If you come to me
[G]I will treasure [D]you
I [A]will
Yes I [C]will
Verse 2
[Em]If you stay with me
We’ll [G]live our life with[D]out a care
[Em]If you stay with me
More [G]happiness we’d [D]have to share
[Em]If you stay with me
[G]I will treasure [D]you
I [A]will
Yes I [C]will
Chorus
[G]I will [D]treasure [A]you
[G]I will [D]treasure [A]you
[G]I will [D]treasure [A]you
I [C]will
Yes I [Em]will
Verse 3
[Em]Live your life with me
[G]We will stay for[D]ever young
[Em]Live your life with me
Keep [G]on the journey [D]we’ve begun
[Em]Live your life with me
And [G]I will treasure [D]you
I [A]will
Yes I [C]well
Verse 4
[Em]When we’re old and grey
[G]I will still feel [D]just the same
[Em]When we’re old and grey
As [G]when I saw you [D]that first day
[Em]When we’re old and grey
[G]I will treasure [D]you
I[A] will
Yes I [C]will
Chorus
[G]I will [D]treasure [A]you
[G]I will [D]treasure[A] you
[G]I will [D]treasure [A]you
I [C]will
Yes I [Em7]will
2,024 2007-08-11 01:18:58
Re: Can us song qriters try this?? (31 replies, posted in Songwriting)
How about these chords for the bridge/chorus:
[D]Dance in the darkness [C]dance still for [G]me
[D]Just enfold me in the [C]ecsta[G]sy
[D]Hold me till the night [C]light [G]dims
[D]Into nothingness and [C]all that [Em]is.
2,025 2007-08-11 01:09:09
Re: lyrics only right now... (6 replies, posted in Songwriting)
hey Rebel - just a fine start now just get that guitar to cry you out some chords and you're there!