It's funny how a random line takes on it's own life to become a song, then you realise that the song is more personal than you thought at the time you were writing it. This is a very personal song, it is truly heartfelt, I fully understand the trauma and grief experienced when losing a loved one regardless of whether it's a person or a pet. As a child we always had dogs, chickens [I wanted to keep one as a pet, so my father made me cut off it's head and we ate it at Christmas...you probably didn't need to know that] and cats, my cat ran away, I felt so betrayed that now I hate them. Any way beautiful song, I hope you can make some big bucks out of it.
Phill...keep smiling
4,826 2007-12-11 13:57:00
Re: "The Moment" (9 replies, posted in Songwriting)
4,827 2007-12-10 21:03:37
Re: Sitting in the Park (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
You are right in a way, it is a love song, but it's also a lament for an absent friend.
Let me tell you the story; it's all about a 70 + man who goes to the park every day and sits on the same bench he's sat on for the last 45 years. He met his wife to be there, he proposed over tea and cream cakes, and in August of 1947 they got married. In post war Britain, there was little money for a big wedding or a party, so after a registry wedding they went to the park and danced to the brass band, just the two of them...aw!
So, he goes to the park every day, with his packed lunch and sits feeding the ducks and watching the park life, he thinks about his son and his grandchildren, and of-course he remembers his life with his beloved wife. He's just biding his time until the angels decide it's his time.
This is why I love the song and it makes me sad and melancholy, I love the story that built itself around this song, which is a follow on to another song I wrote, which [when I get around to it] will form an album along with about 10 other songs that will hopefully describe the lives of the people that visit the park.
By the by, it's in waltz time, the key is E major, and it's sort of finger picking, and yes I read the bit about how to put the chords and stuff in, but I'm a bit thick in all things clever, it took me ages to get back onto this page after logging in this morning for the first time. Any help would be welcome.
Phill
4,828 2007-12-10 12:09:21
Re: Finally Got Old (5 replies, posted in Songwriting)
Hi Jets, I've got 4 years to catch you up, and my doc says cholesterol OK, excersise though?
the best excersise is putting pen to paper and writing down whats on your mind
live long and prosper
Phill
4,829 2007-12-10 11:52:22
Re: Sitting in the Park (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
this is a song that sort of linked from another song, you know how you write a character in then he developes his own identity.
personally I like it...hope you do too
4,830 2007-12-10 11:49:26
Topic: Sitting in the Park (7 replies, posted in Songwriting)
this is a song I wrote that makes me feel melancholy every time I play it or just read it...
How the world has changed, you've never let it change you
what you used to be, has fed you and sustained you
now what lies ahead, you don't want to contemplate
the things she might have said; "just leave it all to fate"
Sitting in the park, watch the world pass by you
you used to sit with her, taking in this great view
willow and oak, swans in the water
your son and his wife, with his son and daughter
you've seen these self same kids, grow up and remind you
time keeps marching on, some day it will consume you
then you'll be with her again, happy together
the angels called for her, and so she had to leave you
Now you sit in the park, remembering the laughter
cream tea and cakes, on the day that you asked her
soon you were wed, on a Sunday in August
no party no dance, no money to squander
Sitting in the park, watch the world pass by you
now you sit alone, taking in this great view
you used to sit with her, taking in this great view....
words and music by Phill Williams
hope you like it comments welcome
4,831 2007-12-10 11:21:45
Re: orphan boy (10 replies, posted in Songwriting)
It's a bit of a downer when someone says "that sounds like ..." I don't think Old Doll meant it in a nasty way though, I just wanted to say that I've let people hear a couple of my songs, and that's the response I got...deflating!
Have you written many songs before? and I'm a little bit worried when you say you'll post some chords when you can "play your guitar"...have you hurt your hand? or don't you play already? If not, don't worry, the guitar is easy to learn, and there's always someone willing to work the chords out for you, record the song [vocal only] and up-load it to someone you can trust.
keep on keeping on