4,601

(15 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi again daddy, or should i say " the darbyshire linesman... and you line the main road?"

phill

4,602

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

wow russel, you want me to go up against those songs? they all sound so professional [and a bit rap] i dont like rap and modern free form jazz i can listen to most other forms of music!

the first couple of songs were very pro as if they were done in a real studio by pro's, whereas my effort will fall very short.

i have been trying to think up some kind of theme to use as a background, then coming to the fore between a couple of the verses, but nothing original yet, i keep getting peter and the wolf.

but i havent dismissed it or given up just yet, i'll let you know when i've got something. i find it's best to let these things work themselves out in their own time.

still happy to hear suggestions

phill

4,603

(13 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi mark,

nice song and good performance, you certainly brought the characters to life i could visualise the couple approaching then walking away from each other and the feeling that if only...

great one, cant wait for the finished version

phill

4,604

(10 replies, posted in Songwriting)

i like songs with characters you can identify, we all know a billy "good at drinking, but not at thinking" in fact i know a few...i'm no good at either, but i do know i like this song

phill

4,605

(13 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi getfiddle,

i dont know about tongue twisters but those chords are definitely finger dislocators!!! i notice even chopro couldnt work them out.

this is no criticism, but can you explain the part where you say
" i look in your eyes, i see love it's no surprise
when you look into mine what do you find?"

it sounds like "if you dont find love it's because i dont love you" [figuratively speaking], is that what you meant or am i looking for something that aint there?

it's another good one

keep strumming

phill

4,606

(15 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi daddy, or should i say robert?

back to cowboys then? i bet you wear all the gear when you go line dancing, two left feet myself gave up trying years ago

good one keep em coming

phill

4,607

(19 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi ark,

i've just chucked my whale song in the bin, lunar spirits is top drawer, love the sounds, high tide is good too, yer dooin a fine job there laddy

phill

4,608

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james,

your right, your never short of a big idea. i've been a fan of chamber music since elinor rigby, and i do love peter and the wolf. do you think it's good enough to be even looked at by a proper orchestra?  it would be wonderful, do ya know any orchestras?
sounds like the strings on my mu50 are gonna get a hammering again.

thanks for giving it thought.

now i must go, i've got 3 new songs waiting for vocal parts on my recorder. by the by, did you sort out your mic problem?

phill

4,609

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james,
have you offered this one to status quo, thats not criticism they happen to be one of my favorite bands.

i'm guessing a doofus is a kind of dick...yeh?
so that makes me one...
i love cleverly funny/humorous ditties and this is one of the best

and if you've gone for a hiss, we'll See you in a couple of shakes ha ha

phill

4,610

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

thanks guys, i'm very encouraged by what you've said, i was expecting someone to say "yo man dis site is fer songs only" so thanks for the comments.

i'll give the major/minor thing a go russ, but at the moment no melody line comes to mind.

thanks daddy, i hope you've got a nice melody to go with the C to F riff.

yes it is rather long [and long winded] for a song james

thanks kap, i could see the trees and foxes myself as i put it all down. [54 eh? well i'm 57 at the end of this month, so there!!!]

i'll keep all your suggestions in mind

love and tree hugs to you all

phill

4,611

(14 replies, posted in Songwriting)

this started life as a song, but by the time i got to the 3rd verse i decided it was more of a poem.

comments please.

rising moon

lost in the heat of a summers day
forget that winter soon holds sway
days last longer, darkens late
build your nest furry friend, don't wait

see the trees how they seem to age
their leaves turn gold, their life to fade
summers heat to autumns gloom
seldom seen the rising moon

the nights draw in, the days grow cold
summers birds have up and flown
winter night sky, clear of cloud
crystal beauty, how cold it is now?

autumns gold lies under foot
crumbles lightly at your touch
wake to dew upon the grass
summers warm never lasts

cold yet calm some nights may be
others howl make creatures flee
hide in burrows deep and safe
high above wreaks winters waste

frost begins to take it's toll
while rivers trickle ever cold
on distant hills snow will fall
and in the dark woods foxes call

what is hiding in the shadows?
silent ambush where path narrows
furry beast where death he meets
every beast has need to eat

majestic oak once ruled this land
from mountain stone to coastal sand
now the woods are owned by pine
and the forests in decline

failing too are beasts that roamed
under branches they called home
through seasons warm or cold or wet
soon be gone, soon we forget

as winters broom begins to sweep
furry friend find nest to sleep
to wake again when the air grows warm
descending moon on summers dawn.

by phill williams 2008

i know it's not a song, but then neither is rap, unless there is some tunesmith out there who can fit music to it?

now i like the thought of gently strumming someones beaver or is that caster? a friend of mine had a broadcaster and it didnt look a bit like a telecaster as it had 3 pick-ups and a shed full of knobs to play with if i remember correctly [it's old age catching up i'm afraid]

to flatpicker, ass is a kind of donkey, arse is what you sit on

4,613

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

perseverance in deed.

lovely lyrics, reads like a poem or an ode to the joy of love and friendship.
sweet and tender
just one more word ...beautiful

phill

4,614

(8 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james,

another gem. i wasnt a member when you first posted this one, so it's my first time...be gentle with me, and those little blue pils!

got to say i had a chuckle, and i cant help wondering if in the first chorus you meant to say;"now she's so much older" instead of "bolder" ??? chickened out, me thinks?

i have 9 grandkids, sorry correct that i have 8 and a half grand kids, no 9 is due in october, and i'd recommend it to anyone, their a great source of inspiration

great song james

phill

4,615

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi james, when i played this i went naturally into johnny cash mode with a g to d etc bass line

as you say; nice bit of whimsy

like it

phill

4,616

(2 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kyle, if you play this long enough it will get a bit boring for you, can i suggest varying the sequence a bit, try;

F-F7-C-G| F-F7-C-C7|F-F7-Bb-G7-| C-Bb-Am-F||

if your playing it in the key of "F" the natural chord to play would be G minor, if on the other hand your playing in "C" you should start the sequence with a C chord to be musically correct as i was corrected some time ago by a classically trained keyboardist.

feel free to ignore this if it makes no sense

phill

4,617

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi kap,

when i saw the verses unfold before me i thought it was going to be a song of epic length, but then it ended with a bang [or flash] i thought you said it was up beat?

a tragic tale my friend, so not every one realises the "american dream" then? and just in case there is someone out there that still believes it, the streets of london aren't paved with gold, but the road to hell is paved with good intentions, thats enough cliches

great song, looks finished to me, but your the one that matters, if you think it needs more work i'll wait to see the finished version.

good work, keep it up

phill

4,618

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi zurf, i've got one hell of a lump in my throat!

you've put this together so brilliantly, and the words give the sentiment so well.
we have all experienced a death in the family at one point or another, i lost my mother and father a few years back in close sucesion, but i always believe that if you think of someone often they never truly fade into nothing. so keep his memory alive and he will always be there.

lovely song

phill

4,619

(16 replies, posted in Songwriting)

well what a great response from you all, thanks especially to you mark for that terrific encouragement, and daddy, if you find it best suits your needs in C,F and G you go for it, i've got no problem with that.

helena, always a pleasure to hear from you, almost every song i post seems to bring another bit of your past to mind, which is the desired effect.
i wrote this song from just a title, no idea where it came from or the story itself, i took examples from my own childhood and that of my 6 year old grandson who is innocently mischievous, if you told him "dont touch that" he'd have to touch it even if it meant getting a chair and climbing!

hi kap, it wasnt meant as a love interest but the bond between brother and older sister, or the other way round, just in case any females would like to sing it.

i'll get around to posting the chord sequence in due course, it is in actual fact in Bb!, but that is easily transposed to the key of C.

thanks to all for your very encouraging comments

phill

4,620

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

nice one daddy,

you keep coming up with great subjects, not much of a drinker my self, sometimes on saturday nights or a can o'lager after a hard shift.

rock on

phill

4,621

(11 replies, posted in Songwriting)

hi rik,
please dont think i was criticising your work, it's a lovely sentiment, and it's a good song too, so dont get despondent, and when i say you will get better please take it the right way, because the more you write your bound to some that wont come up to the standard you've already set yourself, we all do, great first effort [if it's your first?] keep it up

phill

4,622

(16 replies, posted in Songwriting)

here we go again, everytime i go to finnish a song off, something else comes up, so i've done a one track recording just piano and vocal, i'm rushing to get it onto myspace before i go work in half an hour. oh yeh, i've got a melody line for it after saying i couldnt find one...say lavvie as the french say..yeh well

thank upyer kilt, and roger for stepping in once more, hope you like what i've done to it

phill

4,623

(4 replies, posted in Songwriting)

nice one daddy,

a song about a woman who's not your wife..eh? and it's not even mothers day!

well done my friend another winner

be good

phill

4,624

(16 replies, posted in Songwriting)

on the rare occasion that i have time to myself on night shift, i get a piece of paper and write down about 15 song titles to write songs around, this is one i did last night, at the moment it's just verse as i cant seem to find a melody for it.

The Broken Doll.by Phill Williams


[Bb]she used to [F]stand there [Gm]in the [F]corner


[Eb]long blond [F]hair and eyes so[Bb] blue-[F]


[Bb]she stood [F]there looking [Gm]down


for years and [F]years


[Eb]each time [F]i saw her, i saw [Bb]you-[F] (REPEAT SAME CHORDS FOR ALL VERSES)




her pretty dress was always perfect


her hair was brushed and make-up too


like some sweet princess from a time gone by


each time i saw her, i saw you.






chorus


[Eb]but she [F]fell so many [Bb]years ago-[Gm]-[F]


[F]her pretty [F]leg was broke in [Bb]two-[F]


[Eb]the glue [F]beneath her dress was [Bb]hidden [F]from [Gm]view


[Cm]each time i saw her, i saw[Fsus] you-[F]




a china doll stood outside my reach


and so i climbed upon a chair


and as i reached to take her down to play



i lost my grip and down she fell




repeat chorus




i held the broken leg in trembling hands


you helped me set the leg back true


and though she could no longer stand alone


each time i saw her i saw you






bridge


[Dm]down my [Cm]cheeks my tears were Gm]rolling


[Eb]how i [F]feared my mothers [Gm]wrath


you [Dm]wiped my [Cm]tears, you held me [Bb]close to [Gm]you-[F]


[Eb]the break was [F]hidden by the [Bb]cloth-[F]




and i have loved you since that day


a bond between us strong and true


the broken doll our secret heartache


each time i saw her i saw you




OK so here are the chords as promised, this is so much easier to play on piano, which is why i did it in Bb. if C is easier just transpose by substituting C for Bb, Em for Dm etc. please enjoy it...phill

4,625

(9 replies, posted in Songwriting)

thanks helena,

it happens in every family even the royal ones, we can never work-out whats going on in other peoples minds, could be good, could be bad....so we just have to get on with it the best we can. i've always gone by the tenet that when my boys grow up they can make up their won minds my door is always open to them, but i could see it back then that my ex was poisoning their minds against me and my new wife [well she was new then..lol]

to guitar_girl 7778
ok then what ? sorry i've never been any good at cryptic clues you'll have to be plainer for me as i'm old and not very bright

2 days later; oh yeh i get it now...2o'clock outside the main gates then?

phill