I apologise for the fact that it's in Eb, but I wrote it on piano and that just happened to be the key that came to me...sorry.

it is easier to play the piano in C ...hey ho

Phill

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marcalan,

apologies as i've been away from my post for a while.

where the poem is excellent, and the pro's and meter are also excellent, i dont feel you need to insult or offend any other members or moderators to get yourself noticed! i like most other members who have been on chordie a while know your avatar and will read your words. but it seems it's the same few who take the time to comment, which is sad. i wish more members would take the time. unfortunately they may not for fear of getting abused.

i would ask you though, in the nicest way possible to keep your language in the polite as we are encouraging youngsters to follow these simple guidelines when posting their poems and songs.

this is a great piece of work

phill

hi jerome,

i've been looking for a new guitar for about a year (i'm not easily swayed!) i looked at ibanez as i wanted a guitar with a tremelo. i've had a strat for 30 years and never been completely happy with it! i tried just about all the guitars in south wales, and in the shop in swansea in particular...(i play lefty by the by), i'd seen this tele and i thought...nah! but having reached the end of their stock i said ok pass it over. as soon as i picked it up i knew i'd met my new life-long partner. it felt right in my hands it nestles nicely into my belly and it plays like a dream. no trem but i get a crisp sound i've been looking for, for ages, along with a sweet mellow sound when required.

all i can suggest is...try one, if it fits; buy it. if not get a gibby.

phill

i'll go to that concert too! there have to be enough chordie members to fill a medium sized venue?

helena, oops! sorry about the chorus opening...senior moments all round, keeps us all on our toes?

so, we've done some ballads, we've done a rocker...any suggestions where we go next?

ps. doesnt russ sound angelic?....yeah right!

phill

thanks helena,

grand praise indeed from the mistress of the story poem

phill

hi kenny,

been away my friend so now i'm seeing this. it did make my laugh, i chuckled till my chuckle muscle cramped.

very tongue-in-cheek. excellently written. it doesnt need a bridge in my opinion but to diversify it a bit you could maybe change key for a solo. it would be interesting if you went down a semi-tone? or just added an alternate chord sequence? just thoughts, not criticism.
is this the product of a miss-spent youth?

hope your well over there in canada.

phill

hi kenny, always a pleasure to hear from you. well thanks for that, i hope to be putting up some more new ones in the not too distant future. to be honest, i feel that i can only put up songs on here that have a strong story or is meaningful. some of my songs are not, so you wont see them, but you may hear them on my-space or sound click.

hi buvvy, ethereal....is that swearing?  thanks anyway

phill

thanks guys, it's a kind of true story, but i think that's what a writer does, he watches, observes then writes down what he (or she...sorry) sees. and if the writer is good, people enjoy what they read.

long live the bard

phill

hi lena, it began life as a song about a 19th century sailing ship that gets becalmed in the "doldrums?" i think that's an area of the caribbean? but that didn't really work so i found the fishing line (no pun intended). i was thinking about the cornish fishermen, or any of the south wales fishing ports, but bristol fitted best. i dont even know if you can get becalmed in the bristol channel?

hi geo, yes the water does tend to get very cold in the bristol channel, though it's more likely you'd die of pollution poisoning than the cold or drowning!

hi ark, while i was in spain, i walked along the marina looking for a yacht called coralina....i didn't find one though. maybe next year?

thanks to all

phill

hi C34 and welcome to the chordie poetry section. thanks for this your 1st entry, hope to see more of you and your work. please feel free to comment and advise your fellow members.

nice write

phill

as per your request kenny, you will now find this song on myspace...click left

phill

as it happens tony, i dont play flute either...chuckles

ian anderson has one of the all time greatest voices in my opinion, if i had but a little of his talent...

or for that matter, elton john's, i could go on...but i wont there are so many singers, songwriters and entertainers i admire, i'd be happy with some of their money...any offers?